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How can we speak powerfully to make change in the world?


ramzi06 9 / 17 4  
Aug 18, 2016   #1
TED Summary, How to speak so that people wat to listen By Julian treasure

How can we speak powerfully to make change in the world ? this question leads us to serious introspection on ourself. The speaker believe that it is because our habit that make us not listened. Therefore, we need to ignore 7 habits in our way of speaking, namely Gossip, easily judging someone, negative thinking, complain without action, making up an excuse and blame to someone, lying, and dogmatism (bombarding someone with our opinion). Following this, it is unsufficient if we only avoid this without changing our way of speaking. He argue that there are 4 significant foundation we need to be imposed. This is what he calls "HAIL" (Honestly, Aunthenticity, Integrity and Love) to greet or claim something enthusiatically by liken this as a engine. However, engine requires to be fixed by some equipments in toolbox. Everyone has amazing toolbox but only a few of them are able to open it. The first is register, location of your voice (from throat or heart) and secondly is timbre, represent the way your voice feel. Then we might know prosody, a sing song or the matter of language, the rude one in conversation to make our tune monotone or divers. Pace is the other tools which play an important role to speed the speaking or slow to emphasize. Eventually, pitch and volume which indicates the meaning and catching public attention on what we are saying are also vital. If powerfull speaker combined with conscious listener while designing our soundscape (environment), we will create alteration in our world.

KhatarizNS 3 / 5  
Aug 18, 2016   #2
Hello Ramzi
here are some corrections from me:

The speaker believes that it is

our habit that mad e us to be not listened.
>>out habit that made us to be not listned

He argues that there are 4 significant foundations that we need to be imposed

secondly is timbre, represents the way your voice
dinartika19 37 / 67 6  
Aug 23, 2016   #3
Hi Ramzi !

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Yusuf05 11 / 14 2  
Aug 23, 2016   #4
Hello neighbour!

...serious introspection on ourselves .
... our habit that make us not listened[alternative: resistance] . ...such as gossiping, prejudicing (...) someone with our opinion (dogmatism). Following this, it is insufficient if we only avoid this ...

He argues... (who is him?)

In addition to make easier the readers following your thoughts, it is better to separate your ideas through paragraph..
Keep writing pal!
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Aug 23, 2016   #5
Hi Ramzi, I have a few suggestions for your title;

- How can we speak powerfully to make change in the world with our powerful words ?

The above is my suggestion to your title, I believe this is ore appropriate and rather more logical that conveys the direct idea of the essay.

Furthermore, below are additional remarks for your essay.

- How can we speak powerfully to makeour words change in the world ?

- introspection on ourselfourselves .
- our habit that make us notit is not our habit to listened .
- it is unsufficientinsufficient if we only
- The firstFirst is register,
- If powerfullthe speaker is powerful, combined
- we willcan create alterationchange in our world.

There you have it Ramzi, I hope the above remarks are helpful to your revision and for future writing reference, mind the composition of your sentences, make sure that they are properly arranged and in logical order and that they depict the goal and the idea of the essays.
Faridadwi18 67 / 104 13  
Aug 24, 2016   #6
Hi ramzi,

- The speaker believeS that
- ... to serious introspection on ourself.ourselves.
-He argueS that there are 4 significant foundationS we need to be imposed.
- a sing song which people sing or the matter of language
- we will create alteration in ourchange the world.

Hopefully it helps.


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