However, the current state of training in industry and academia is trending towards producing more and more specialists which indicates that specialists are more valuable than generalists.
After this sentence, before you end the first paragraph, you should probably add a thesis statement that gives the main idea of the essay. What point will you be making? Make it at the end of this first paragraph.
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In the industry, most employees start their
carrier careers by having approximately one year of internship (training). --What industry? I don't think this is true for all industries.
Had generalists been more beneficial to industry than specialists, it would have been the opposite way around.---Oh! Very good point. I agree with you. And you know what else? A specialist IS a generalist. In order to be a specialist, you need the knowledge of a generalist. Well... mostly. I think one needs to be a generalist to some extent before being able to specialize.
Yes, I think we need the knowledge of both generalists and specialists.
Provided with
an adequate management, specializing does not
The ending is great. The whole essay is great. My most important advice for you is to ADD A THESIS STATEMENT at the end of that first paragraph.