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Specialist, Grammar, and Voluntary-controlled Schools are programs which decreased gradually


Alamsyah Ismail 24 / 43  
Sep 29, 2016   #1
The table represents information about the proportions of pupils attending in four secondary school types in period 2000 and 2009. It is important to notice that Specialist, Grammar, and Voluntary-controlled Schools are programs which desreased gradually in this period. While Community Schools is the only one school that increased dramatically to attend of pupils.

Between 2000 and 2009, there are two schools that dropped steadily to attend by pupils. Specialist and Grammar schools fell slowly from more than one in ten to 10%; and from 24% to 12%. And Voluntary-controlled School dropped dramatically stood at more than a half to a fifth%.

A part of previous comprison, Community school had been a schools to attend by pupils that rose dramatically from more than one in ten in 2000 to more than 32% in 2005. But, the highest rise happened from 32% to less than three-fifths in 2009.




Sari Trisna 7 / 11  
Sep 29, 2016   #2
Hi Alamsyah Ismail..
Let give you some corrections..

....
Between 2000 and 2009, there arewere two schools that ...
...
And Voluntary-controlled School dropped ...
A part of previous comprisoncomparison , Community school had ...

Good Job.
I hope it is helpful..
Dioba 68 / 104 7  
Sep 29, 2016   #3
Hi Alam,after reading your summary, i have some suggestions, perhaps useful for you.
1.wrong spelling words
desreased ----> decreased
comprison -----> comparison
2.Between 2000 and 2009, there are two schools that dropped ...----> there were
3.While Community Schools is the only one school that increased ... ----> don not need put one
4.And Voluntary-controlled School dropped (...) half to a fifth% .------> use conjunction word such as furthermore,meanwhile


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