Topic: Some people say that schools should spend more money on computers, others say that more money should be spent on teachers' wages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The invention of computer and its fast enhancement through last decades has changed our lives in many aspects. One of these facets is education, so that in some cases it could play the roles of teachers through online education. In the light of this fact, some believe that schools need to invest more in computers as powerful tools of education rather than increasing teachers' salaries, while others think in the opposite way. The question that must be asked is: what facts are deemed important that makes either computers or teachers deserved to receive more budgets.
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Okay. the topic you are dealing with is truly controversial and highly analytical in discussion. While both sides of the argument do carry merit, I believe that you need to concentrate on the aspect that dictates giving teachers higher wages rather than spending money on more computers. Consider the following; all of the examples that you gave about internet tutorials and the like still have one common denominator, there are people, teachers to be specific, on the other end of the video who are teaching the viewer exactly what to do in order to accomplish a task. Even in the online research materials, there are still human beings who are putting together the facts and figures that allow the computers to become highly enhanced and informative tools of education. If you look at the wider picture, the computer, internet, and the overall technology, will still be useless without teachers to make them useful to others who want to learn.
Ahmad, if you want to improve your writing skills and bring it up to a higher level, you need to learn to become more analytical in the way that you view the prompts posed before you. There is always the common and obvious answer to every prompt, behind which are deeper reasoning and lines of logic that are the true driving force for the essay. Never go for the obvious discussion. Always ask yourself. What is the better answer? What are the other reasons I can discuss for this topic other than the obvious? You need to go beyond obvious logic and aim for deeper knowledge and understanding paired with logic. I hope what I said made sense to you :-)
Consider the following
what you say is true, but believe it or not this is what is happening. for making a video a part time staff, with low price, or sometimes free tutors are enough. For instance melb uni dismissed more than 500 staffs, both academic and professional, last year. The policy of the current education in most parts of the world is that we do not need the traditional education system anymore.
anyway, I'm rewriting this essay, but not sure how different the new version would be :(
You are thinking of teachers in a normal sense of the word again. Remember, I told you that you have to think outside of the box when writing certain essays. Don't think of the obvious. Look at the people that you described in those videos. What do they all have in common? They are TEACH-ing you how to do something. Hence, these people are are all TEACHERS. Regardless of whether they are graduates of education degrees or the like, they are teaching you something and therefore, must be called a teacher, or if you prefer, tutor. Whatever you address them as, it does not change the fact that the computer technology will be useless without them and their TEACH-ings. Always think deeper. Don't always assume the obvious reasons, meaning, definitions, etc. of the words or prompts. Analyze the meaning, look into the possible interpretations. Then write a draft essay. Even a mother teaching a child to count is a teacher. That is why our parents are called our first TEACHERS. They don't always have to have an education degree to be paid to teach. A car mechanic can teach a maintenance class and he was never taught the rudiments of education or how to teach. It is a natural ability. The car mechanic is a TEACHER because he IMPARTS KNOWLEDGE. As such, he is viewed as a teacher and should be given ample remuneration for sharing his knowledge about his craft. I look forward to reading your next version :-) Think outside of the box. Analyze. Heighten your sense of logic :-) Don't confine yourself to the obvious options.
Hi Luisa, I wrote this topic again. Please have a look at this revision (while you are reading second paragraph, you may say that all documents available in the internet have been written by humans, and all of them are TEACHERs. But, this is what the supporter of the computer-based education believe in and this is not my fault :D. We have a meeting every week with our supervisor and this is one of the topics we sometimes discuss on. Believe me, this is where the modern education system is going :)))
OK, now here is my essay. Hope it is more satisfactory than the previous one (please brutally criticize the essay :O)
Topic:Some people say that schools should spend more money on computers, others say that more money should be spent on teachers' wages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The advent of the internet has changed computers into powerful tools that could influence many aspects of our life, in particular education. The availability of a huge volume of online information has introduced the idea of the replacement of teachers with computers. Accordingly, the people who advocate this opinion believe that schools need to invest more in providing students with upgraded computers rather than increasing teachers' salaries and hiring more mentors. However, this idea has serious critics, who think because of complex nature of education, teachers cannot be eliminated from the equation. Hence, the question that must be asked is: which side of the debate indicate more persuasive reasons?
The supporters of the computer-based classrooms emphasize on the fact that all the educational resources are accessible in the internet. Powerful search engines like google can offer students with loads of documents, tutorials and instructions just by choosing an appropriate keyword. Therefore, they believe the new education system may only need a few full time staffs as teachers and the majority part of the education budgets must go to equipping schools with computers.
On the other side of the argument, it is claimed that the followers of the computer-centered education have not realized how complicated a teacher's work is. The responsibility of a teacher does not limit to transferring knowledge to students. The main job of him/her, however, is to show how theoretical information is applied in practice. In addition, traditional classrooms have the privilege of one-on-one communication that gives students a chance to directly ask their questions. Nevertheless, teachers cannot do their jobs in a perfect way without the feeling of job satisfaction. Higher salary can give them incentive to make a better contribution to the students' learning process. Moreover, if teachers earn more money they are not obliged to work two or three shifts for affording living expenses. The fatigue stemming from long time work would negatively influence their productivity.
In conclusion, although computers can help students to have access to a wide range of educative online resources, I believe they will never take teacher's positions. Teaching is an intricate process that only humans can do it, and for being done flawlessly by a teacher, job satisfaction is a need. The latter point is only achievable by rising up the wages of teachers to put more effort and produce better students.
Excellent work! You not only considered both sides of the issue, but you also successfully argued both sides in a believable manner. That means that you have offered your reader a chance to make an informed decision about a topic of great importance. The personal opinion that you used to weigh on on the topic also proves that you have taken great care in considering all the pros and cons of the arguments provided, thus giving your opinion greater weight as it is based upon insight rather than commonly known and considered information. This is truly an essay you should be proud of because you have given a perfect argument to for your topic. Although there are some grammatical errors here and there, it did not distract the reader from the strong and interesting discussion that you presented. Keep up the good work :-)
