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You have just spend a week with a friend for holiday. You realised you had left your wallet there.


jarodshen 1 / -  
May 18, 2020   #1
You have just spent a week with a friend on holiday. When you got home, you realised you had left your wallet there.

Write a letter to your friend.



In your letter:
- thank your friend for the holiday
- explain that you left your wallet in their house
- give them instructions on how to send it back to you


Dear John,
I hope you're doing well. I'm writing to thank you for the holiday arrangement and to inform you I left my wallet at your house.

Last week was the best time in my life. I'm thankful you planned the wonderfully holiday and invited me to stay with you. The beef noddle so delicious and the sunset at Halong Bay was so beautiful and it still fresh in my memory.

When I arrived at home, I was realised that I left my wallet at your place. I believed it still sitting on the table beside the bed. I was hurry up during packing my stuff and forgot to take it.

I have sent you the Fedex courier envelop in separate mail. You just put the wallet in and seal it. Please call the pickup hotline or drop it to the nearest Fedex office. Don't worry about the courier fees, they will charge it direct to my credit card.

All the best.
Jarod

Holt [Contributor] - / 8,569 2485  
May 18, 2020   #2
Spelling Errors:
Fedex ( Proper Noun) - FedEx
noddle = noodle

Vocabulary Errors:

Wonderfully / wonderful - both words mean excellent, great or marvelous. However, wonderfully indicates more of an emotion than a setting so it would have been better to have said "wonderful holiday"

Tense presentation:
The beef noodle WAS so delicious - past tense
I was realized - (present tense)
I believed I left - (present tense)

Action reference:
I was hurrying up during WHILE packing
... envelop in A separate mail...
drop it OFF at the nearest...
... charge it DIRECTLY to my...

You got the message across. You were able to follow the discussion instructions. The problem, is that your sentence structures were highly problematic. As you can see from the errors above, you need to do more sentence building exercises. Doing so should help you improve your sentence formation and presentation skills.


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