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Spirits and rituals concept essay

soul997 2 / 5  
Nov 27, 2009   #1
Ok I had problems trying to post. Ok so I'm not that good at writing essays suggestions and proof reading/editing would be great. Thank you.

One of the concepts that were discussed in class is outlined in one of the chapters concerning communal religions, which encompasses the idea that people organize rituals such as rites of passages and harvest ceremonies, in addition to having shamans. Both of the ethnographies illustrate elements of rites of passages and harvest ceremonies and how they are associated within their own distinct social groups, for example harvest ceremonies would be held as long standing-annual events for blessings of the gods and celebrations for special occasions. Similarly there would be the practice of rites of passage in which the individual must go through a transition from one stage of their life to the other.

The first ethnography depicts an example of the rites of passage in which the individual must go through the process of a social transition. Nisa experiences her first menstruation, and the women of the village enclose her in a hut and perform the ritual ceremonies that accompany that momentous event in a !Kung woman's life. A woman's first menstruation is the process whereby she is considered an adult and is no longer considered a child. The ceremonies that would accompany this event would be woman dancing around the village and holding a festival. We also see similar ceremony practices being held in fusion of the worlds where people were accustomed to thirst because they would experience seasonal drought. So in order to thank the spirits for their good weather and a successful crop season they would hold a harvest festival, to celebrate the good crop season.

In the second ethnography Songhay mediums play similar roles in their society to what shamans would in communal religions. Shamans are individuals who are able to act as intermediaries between the supernatural realm (spirit world) and ordinary people (human world). Likewise Songhay mediums would serve similar roles in their societies, Songhay mediums would allow the spirit to take possession of their body and the spirit makes contact with the human world. All mediums would be affected by their practices, which made them obliged to pay lifelong allegiance to the spirit and support the actives of the spirit. At the same time in Nisa we see that there also exist the belief in the spirit world, in particular the roles spirits are thought to play in healing and illness.

In general you can see that both ethnographies share familiar facets with the supernatural realm, which is discussed in the reading of Mirror for Humanity. The societies discussed in the ethnographies have spirit connections with the spirit world and these associations with spirits affected their lifestyle, culture and behaviour in there everyday life.

lilgangwolf 5 / 13  
Nov 28, 2009   #2
What was the prompt?
and the entire thing was more of a summary.
it needs to be more about YOU YOU YOU.
use more "I"s.

actually it would be better if i knew what the prompt was before i give out comments,,,,
OP soul997 2 / 5  
Nov 28, 2009   #3

It's more of a formal posting that connects concepts or ideas. Ya proof reading and/or editing would be helpful.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,334 129  
Nov 29, 2009   #4
... event in a !Kung woman's life. ----> what is this? !Kung

Stop bumping, it makes the thread ugly and creates more work for me!

Hey, good news, you write very well with good topic sentences and no errors that I can see. Now you should go to the next level with your composition by using MLA style citations. Look up MLA citation on google, and learn about how to make a Works Cited list, in-text citations, and so forth. It's easier than it seems. Good luck! You are a good writer.
yang 2 / 313  
Nov 29, 2009   #5
Sorry bro, you need to add a lot more than philosophy. The people who read this are most likely very logical philosophers, so don't try to impress them with mild theories.

Talk about what you think of this.

O, please don't use you's.

PS Are you sure that you wrote this? Why would you talk about menstruation? It's pretty much straight out of a philosophy or religious book.
OP soul997 2 / 5  
Nov 29, 2009   #6
so is it good?
yang 2 / 313  
Nov 30, 2009   #7
Not gonna lie, didn't understand most of it...but the admin might.

It's more of a formal posting that connects concepts or ideas. Ya proof reading and/or editing would be helpful.

so it's not a college essay?
If it's not, then I take back ALL my comments.

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