Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.
sporting competitions influence on citizens feelings
Identifying the methods which can control the emotions between people is always not clear. After some researches, they understand popular events can perform this among the folks. Sport events specially act the main role because most of people like sports competition either playing or watching, so its affection is remarkable. I believe that these kinds of popular happening help human calm down their tensions even in the range of international and show their national emotions in a better way.
Humankind always searches a good way to exhibit his abilities and power to others. To illustrate, in the past centuries, gladiators fought each other to clarify which one was stronger but after the expansion of human civilization, these battles showed the patriotic emotions of citizens and increased their fatherland. The tensions between the people multiplied year by year till sports events begun. After these competitions, the volume of stress was decreased sharply.
One reason might make friendship between two or more countries during the races. Athletes gave hands to each other that caused avoid rival feelings somewhat and just entertain instead of blooding. Also, that opening and closing ceremonies which were held at the first and last day of events, intended to introduce the culture of the host to the other participated countries. So, if someone knew wrong thing about that country, it would vanish.
Athletes lost their extra energy during playing that caused to control their calmness in the time of crisis. This is true for their fans because they shouted during playing that made them more relax. As a result most people in the world can control themselves in difficult situation.
On the other hand, there are foreign coaches or players in every team that aid to increase kindness between the people of those countries. In addition, some kids and teenagers are the fan of those foreign players. Then, following them caused to learn their languages or culture that it will raise the level of community culture and comprehension.
Consequently, organizing such events can help citizens to control their tensions internationally and national feelings better by reinforcing their cognition and raising culture. Hence, it is better to increase such events to reducing crimes in the world however there are lots of people do inhuman acting during plays.Holt Educational Consultant - / 14,797 
4780 Maryam, this essay that you wrote was to have been completed based on the following prompt discussion instruction: Do you agree or disagree? As such the paraphrased prompt should have shown a restatement of the topic plus a simple agreement or disagreement with the given statement. You did not provide such an opinion as your thesis statement for this essay and as such, discussed the essay in a completely different manner. That means the only score that this essay can garner you, had this been an actual test, would have been a 1. That score shows a clear lack of understanding of the prompt discussion requirements, which translates into an inability to understand English instructions. Why did that happen? What was the score based on? Simply put, your response was completely unrelated to the task that you were asked to discuss. If you were given a set of instructions for an experiment and you did not follow it because you did not understand the instructions, what do you think would happen? Exactly. That is the disaster that was created by your essay. The mere fact that you failed to pass the TA scoring portion immediately kills all chances of you passing this test.
SPORTING COMPETITIONS INFLUENCE ON CITIZENS FEELINGS
Why do you have a title here as IELTS standard structure does not promote essay title
Identifying the methods which can control the emotions between people is always not clear. After some researches, they understand popular events can perform this among the folks. Sport events specially act the main role because most of people like sports competition either playing or watching, so its affection is remarkable. I believe that these kinds of popular happening help human calm down their tensions even in the range of international and show their national emotions in a better way.
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I think you really need to check collocations and word choice as you write. A lot of your sentences sound as if they're some bad translation from another language. I suggest you use the collocation dictionary as you practise your writing to make better phrases, and also improve your vocabulary.
@rubychautran
I agree with you. The essay is quite hard to comprehend, like in this paragraph:
Athletes lost their extra energy [...]
Am like what point are you trying to make?
