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The statistics of afforestation on all continents over the world


angelaaa 1 / 1  
Jan 14, 2020   #1

forest areas on the globe



The graph show the data about the forested land in omen of hectares in various part of the world

Overall, many of them are stable and some drop a little but no significant reduction.

Firstly, the first three country is Africa, Asia and Europe. We can easily see that, Europe is the highest reached 1001 in 2005. Besides that, Asia is the lowest with 584. From 1990 to 2005, Africa is the only one reduced, and the two others rise but not significantly

Secondly, in the next three country, Oceania is the lowest with the number 197 in 2005 and South America drop from 1990 to 2005 but still the highest in this three country. North America steady with the number 705 in 2000 to 2005.

To sum up, we can see that Oceania is the lowest of all and besides that, Europe reached the highest




Annie97 3 / 6 2  
Jan 15, 2020   #2
First of all, try to re-read the essay to avoid grammar mistakes. One other serious mistake is that these are continents not countries; if you cannot think of the vocabulary "continent," areas would be better than countries.

Instead of dividing the continents into ones with more forest areas and ones with less, it would be better if you compare the increases and decreases.

Also, you don't really have to write a conclusion for task 1, and your conclusion does not sum up your points in body paragraphs.
OP angelaaa 1 / 1  
Jan 16, 2020   #3
@Annie97
Thank you so much, I have learn something new!
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Jan 18, 2020   #4
It will be extremely difficult for you to gain a passing score for this type of presentation. The main reason you will fail the test is because you lack too many words to complete the 150 minimum word count. You wrote only 127 words which means there will be points deducted for the TA section based on the missing 23 words. Since you have written less than the minimum word count, it will be assumed that you did not properly explain the information within the graph and as such, will receive additional points deductions in the remaining scoring brackets. Remember, you cannot fully explain, in an understandable manner, what the image indicates when you write less than the required word count. I won't even begin to mention the writing problems in the essay because it makes no sense doing so. I can't properly judge your writing skills when you did not make the effort to write the required word count.


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