Unanswered [1] | Urgent [0]
  

Home / Writing Feedback   % width Posts: 2


[Writing Task 1] Statistics about branches of banks and financial institutions in Nepal in 2019


hanablaaaa 3 / 6 1  
Dec 22, 2022   #1
The table below shows the total number of branches of banks and financial institutions in Nepal in 2019. The graph shows the ten districts in Nepal having the highest number of bank branches in 2019.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.


Write at least 150 words.


While the table states the total amount of branches of banks and financial institutions in Nepal in 2019, the given graph illustrates the ten districts in Nepal with the highly significant number of bank branches in 2019. This essay will analyze the significant points of the statistics.

Generally, in 2019, the majority of branches of banks and financial institutions belong to commercial banks and microfinance institutions. Besides, Kathmandu is seemly the financial center district of Nepal with the highest number of bank branches.

In the mentioned table, the commercial banks and microfinance institutions have the highest numbers of branches representatively at 3585 and 3629. The share of both the two institutions dominated the table with 41,27% belonging to the commercial banks and 41,77% belonging to the microfinance banks. On the other hand, the smallest number of branches of banks and financial institutions is 205 belonging to finance companies.

Turning to the graph below, it is not difficult to see that the district having the highest number of bank branches is Kathmandu with nearly 800 branches. The district had the lowest number of bank branches is Dang with approximately 150 branches.



Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4770  
Dec 23, 2022   #2
I must point out an evident error that has appeared twice now in your task 1 writing presentations. You seem to be under the impression that the best way to score highly in this exam part is by combining the task 1 and 2 writing styles. Since the tasks have different objectives and different scoring considerations, the mixed writing style will not increase the score. Rather, deductions will be applied to writing and discussion format sections as it relates to the task objective.

Do not use the restatement + writer's opinion/ repetition of writing information in the summary overview. That is a task 2 writing practice, it does notrelate to task 1 requirements. In fact, you must learn to write in a proper task 1 format. Using a combined task writing presentation is not helpful to a score that could be lowered due to a confusing presentation style.

Try to do a better job at analysing the provided image. Do not skip the information source mention. Thatis an important part of the summary presentation.

On the other hand,

Where is the one hand comparison that should come before this?

Present uniform paragraphs of 3-5 sentences in length. 2 sentences will mean the paragraph in not fully developed, analyzed, and formatted. These will not be considered full paragraphs. A number of these paragraphs will receive reduced preliminary scores because of the lack of proper information dissemination in the paragraphs. Sometimes, thia problem can be solved using proper wording to introduce interlinked information through the use of proper transition sentences, phrases, or linking / transition words. This is an obvious weak point for you in both writing tasks that I have reviewed so far.


Home / Writing Feedback / [Writing Task 1] Statistics about branches of banks and financial institutions in Nepal in 2019
Writing
Editing Help?
Fill in one of the forms below to get professional help with your assignments:

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Best Essay Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳