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Statistics of coffee and bananas consumption some years ago in Eurrope


Test_Taker15 4 / 3 2  
Sep 9, 2016   #1
The tables provide sales data of Fairtrade labelled coffee and bananas in five European countries (UK, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden) in 1999 and 2004. The units are measured in Euros.

Overall, coffee sales had increased in all five countries, but the same was not true for bananas as sales had decreased in two countries (Sweden and Denmark) in 2004 when compared to other countries.

In terms of coffee, Switzerland, which sold coffee worth €3 mil, in 1999 was the top marketer. Sweden, on the other hand, whose coffee sales were at € 0.3 mil in 1999 and € 1 mil in 2004, remained at the bottom of the table in both the years. In 2004, Switzerland's coffee sales doubled (€ 6 mil), while the UK's had significantly increased manifold (€ 20 mil) when compared to 1999. In the same year, only a marginal increase in coffee sales were observed in Denmark and Belgium.

With regard to bananas, Switzerland was the top marketer, which sold bananas for € 15 mil and € 47 mil in 1999 and 2004, respectively. While sales in the UK and Belgium increased in 2004, it had decreased in Sweden (€ 1 mil) and Denmark (€ 0.9 mil) when compared to 1999.

TJLuschen - / 241 203  
Sep 9, 2016   #2
Hi, I think you did a good job with this report. One note, please try to include the actual chart or table from the prompt. I had to look for one from a similar question. You have presented the data fairly clearly, but your intro could be improved and I have several other suggestions:

... Switzerland was the top marketer [for both years shown in the chart, selling], which sold bananas [worth] € 15 mil and € 47 ... {your version was ok, but this sounds a bit better I think}

... Belgium increased in 2004, [they] had decreased in Sweden (€ 1 mil) and Denmark (€ 0.9 mil) {it is unclear whether these numbers refer to the decrease or to the sales} when compared to 1999.


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