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Statistics of CO2 emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal


just_writer 24 / 42 5  
Oct 24, 2017   #1
The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


The artificial production of carbon dioxide



The graph compares the production of carbon dioxide in average for each individual based on metric tonnes in four countries, namely, United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.

The United Kingdom appears to have the most numbers, started from around 11 metric tonnes in 1967 and gradually decreased to just under 9 in 2007, however, remained as the most producer of CO2 gas till the end. After the UK, there is Sweden, which has the second biggest number, around 9 in 1967 with a sudden increase to its peak approximately in 1988 to around 10 and a rapid decrease till 2007 to around 5.

The Italy started from Just well over 4 with a fast increase to around 8 in 1997 and remained steady till 2007. The Portugal has the lowest number of CO2 production in 1967 with only 1 metric tonnes per person on average, nevertheless, its figures grow quickly over the years to reach 5.

Through the years, The UK stayed on top with the highest number and the Portugal, putting the quick increase aside, remained the lowest producer of CO2 till 2007 when they meet the Sweden in 5, who had a surprisingly decrease from around 8.

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nemezidus 5 / 13 7  
Oct 24, 2017   #2
Just_writer, hi, there are some grammar mistakes and misspellings. I will address the core:

1. Yous start well by paraphrasing the question. A small correction: "production of carbon dioxide in average measured in metric tonnes per each individual based on metric tonnes in four countries.

2. I went through these IELTS tasks too. I would recommend to avoid making very long sentences, however appealing it may seem. It is hard to follow for the reader especially when there are references to numbers and years. Try to split them into several shorter sentences.

3. You have a nice structure. The Overview is an absolute must for this type of WT1. Overview usually has one to three sentences, one of which has to be complex (comparison, subordinate etc.) Generally there are two options available: start with an overview or end with an overview. I see you preferred the last one. But the overview should provide general trends and observations with no reference to specific numbers and dates. So an overview in the last sentence may be more general. For example: "Overall, it is apparent that while in Italy and Portugal production of CO2 increased over the period, the UK and Sweden experienced a decrease in the amount of carbon dioxide emissions. The United Kingdom remained the country with the highest amount of CO2 produced per capita.

4. I recommend to learn how to refer to numbers and indicators. I see you use "numbers" quite a lot. You could use amount, volume, rate etc or refer sometimes directly to the number (e.g. 8 metric tonnes per capita).

Hope you find this useful. Thanks.


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