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# Statistics of underground station passengers in London during the period from 6am to 10pm.

May 3, 2019   #1

## The Underground Station passenger numbers

The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.

The line graph illustrates data of Underground Station passenger in London during the period from 6 a.m to 10 p.m. Overall, it is clear that the highest commuters use the underground station of London at 8 a.m and 6 p.m.

At 6 a.m around 100 underground passengers can be found and this numbers peaked at 400 at 8 a.m, while those of passenger experienced a gradual decline from 8 a.m to 10 a.m, was 180. Compared to a decreased last period, the data of underground passenger rose slightly to 300 at 2 p.m, followed by a slip to 99 at 4 p.m. After 4 p.m the passenger number increased significantly and reaches to 380. During the remainder of this period, the data of underground users decreased with a slight fluctuation until 10 p.m.

In conclusions, the highest number of passenger of London underground can be found in the stations during office going and office leaving time a day.

Thank you in advance to help improving my writing skill

JennieD - / 2
May 3, 2019   #2
- ... data of Underground Station passengers
- ... the highest amount of commuters
- this numbers peaked
- In conclusions
Maria [Contributor] - / 262 131
May 3, 2019   #3
Unless you are referring to a formal pronoun, underground station should remain to not be capitalized. Omit lines that are not substantial to the essay. Instead, allocate these words (as you are working with a word count) to more necessary content. Try to create structures that are less dragging.

Let's revise a couple of lines.
The line graph illustrates data on the number of underground station passengers in London from 6 a.m to 10 a.pm. Overall, it is clear that the highest numbers received by the station are at 8 a.m and 6 p.m.

You should also keep in mind that consistency is important in writing essays. Do you plan to call them passengers or commuters? Stick to one and do not stray.

I would also recommend looking into alternatives of what you can say instead of continuously mentioning the time stamps. For instance, if in a succeeding sentence you are still referring to the same time stamp, you can just mention that it is within the same duration. As long as it is synonymous and applicable, use it. This will help your essay tremendously.

Best of luck.