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IELTS; How to stay healthy in your country? Reasons & Answeres


Redtape 4 / 31 11  
Apr 18, 2013   #1
Question:- A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet,gets plenty of exercise and avoid stress.What should people do to stay healthy in your country? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Nowadays very few people are unknown to the word "stress".The current cyber age is demanding more than what one can deliver and eventually causing them more stressed than ever before.This could lead to potential long term ailments like diabetes,obesity and blood pressure etc.In order to avoid this people are getting educated through various channels and promoting healthy eating, exercising to stay fit and active.

Earlier people tend to eat the food without worrying about the contents of the products.The better science world around us made people smart in choosing the diet and cutting down unwanted salts,sugars,saturated,unwanted cheese and fats.Recently various health departments around the world made it mandatory to display the contents and the energy levels on various fast foods.Undoubtedly there is more demand for nutritionist ever before to give proper guidance in this area.More and more people realizing the health benefits of vegetables,fresh fruits and started making them as part of their regular meal.

On the other hand apart from healthy eating a well structured physical activity also required .Good exercise helps to function all parts of human body and also allows new cell growth with in human body.These days most of the corporate offices encouraging and promoting by providing a free fitness membership at the local fitness centers and yoga classes. Youngsters keep themselves busy in various sporting events in order to stay on top of stress.

In my opinion to stay healthy and fit it's not necessary to eat less and lift the weights,running on treadmills for hours and hours, but a simple change in our daily routine could make a big difference such as a simple walk in the park could keep the stress at a bay.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Apr 18, 2013   #2
Nowadays very few people are unknown to the word "stress"

... everybody knows about it :D
Nowadays, the word "stress" is one of the most commonly used words.
Wow... great introduction :) ... very nice :)

Earlier people tend to eat the food without worrying about the contents of the products.

.... or ingredients?

.What should people do to stay healthy in your country?

This is the actual question and you need to tell what people do for that. Then give reasons and examples. Your body paras sound a bit deviated from this task.
OP Redtape 4 / 31 11  
Apr 18, 2013   #3
Redtape:
.What should people do to stay healthy in your country?
This is the actual question and you need to tell what people do for that. Then give reasons and examples. Your body paras sound a bit deviated from this task

Thank you Dumi for your suggestion.

The structure I followed is what was the previous scenario, how people are getting educated and what they are doing in order to achieve the prime goal. Do you want me to give more examples on their food habits and exercise?

Like people are switching to low fat and low carbohydrate food, stuff like that? That's what I understood from your comment. Please don't get me wrong.
shaddy 17 / 47 7  
Apr 18, 2013   #4
I think in the essay we must conclude with the contents center to the point that we have had already mentioned in the body paragraphs. If I state your conclusion then I would say

"To summarize, staying healthy is not only dependent on gym exercises and\or eating less but in my opinion one must adopt a routine of daily walk for some time. "
OP Redtape 4 / 31 11  
Apr 18, 2013   #5
Yes, you are correct shaddy. It makes sense if we end with "to summarize" as the Q didn't asked for my opinion.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Apr 21, 2013   #6
:) Well, I think your prompt needs you to discuss what people should do to stay healthy in your country. So you first need to tell them what they need to do. Then tell why you say so (reasons). Back up these reasons with specific examples.

... (your first few lines are find )In order to stay healthy, the people in my country should be made aware of healthy eating habits and the importance of physical exercises.

First, in my country, people pay less attention to their eating habits mainly due to lack of knowledge. Therefore it is important to educate them about food nutrients and balance diets. For example, the authorities can promote healthy diets through advertising and organizing health camps.


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