While I did catch a number of grammatical errors in your paper, I am happy to say that you have managed to improve the content of the essay to the point where the revisions can concentrate on the grammatical and sentence structure problems of the essay already. You have provided an excellent voice and used strong examples to drive home the point that people need to stay well informed using various news sources. Now, let me point out the portions that require editing:
With overabundant information, opinions, ideas, and perspectives overflowing form books, magazines, thesis , Internet , and TV media , people should get information from these various sources in order to stay well-informed since these sources provide countless perspectives and evidence that verifies it.
- This section requires proofreading on your part. Note the capitalization issues as well. Please note the corrections below:
- ... perspectives overflowing
from books, magazines,
the internet , and television...
. A hermit who hasnever gone out for a decade praise a smart phone as the greatest invention while an affluent businessmen with the latest technology simply scoff at it.
- ... who has
not been out for a decade will praise a smart phone... with the latest technology
will simply scoff...
Different perspectives create different information which is why seeking news or information from various sources is the key to stay well informed.
- ... is the key to stay
ing well informed.
a park ranger write an article stating how that energy is harmful for the wildlife and must be immediately prohibited.
- a park ranger
may write an article...
Through these perspectives from various sources, one would be well-informed, able to talk to different people without any dissent or misunderstandings.
- Add a sentence that refers to the importance of making informed decisions using various news information as sources for the decision making process.it will be much easier torealize a fraud
- ... to
recognize a fraud...
Not only will these sources verify information but also grants more access to specific information about any subjects.
- This is an unnecessary sentence.The above revisions will help fix the structural problem of your sentences and clarify certain points that may be unclear due to your grammar mistakes.