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A step that we can do to avoid the bad habit


Aris05 31 / 24 1  
Sep 29, 2016   #1
TED : A Simple Way to Break Habit

In this video, the speaker, Judson Brewer, talked about a step that we can do to avoid the bad habit. First of all, he talked that humans have tendency to do act in positive and negative ways and it is automatically recorded in our brain system. For instance, some people do not want to eat too much because they consider about effect sides such us obesity and blood sugar disease. However, others ignore the risks because of some reasons like taste and daily need. In addition, Judson said that many people tend to near what they are suppose to be prohibition because it gives a big curiosity why I have to avoid this caution. As the result, many people are attracted to try harmful action. Many school children, for example, smoke, though they know that smoking has been restricted as provide many drawbacks especially for health. Then, he talked that mindfulness training is able to help people to reduce their curiosity. This method does not avoid people to do something bad instead. Therefore, it will give experience to them. For example, people can try ciggarette if they want. This situation is going to reduce their desire to smoke, while they will get their own experience about it. In this case, people tend to state that smoking is not good and gives them a lot of drawbacks. People have changed their knowladge to be wisdom and it is going to be guidline for making better life.

akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Sep 29, 2016   #2
Hi Aris Indra..
These are my thoughts towards your summary.


First of all, he talked that humans PEOPLE (Actually, humans and people have the same meaning. However, you should avoid using humans if there is an explanation about plants or animal. Human, plants, and animals are the unity. It is about the collocation) have A tendency to do act...

... because they consider about ITS effectS sides such us obesity and ...
... because of some reasons like THE taste and daily need.
... to near what they are supposeD to be prohibition because it gives a big curiosity THAT why I have to ...
As the result, many A LARGE NUMBER OF people are attracted to try THE harmful action. Many school children A GREAT NUMBER OF STUDENTS, for example, smoke(...) been restricted as IT provideS many drawbacks ...

This method does not avoid HELP people to do AVOID something bad instead.
For example, people can try ciggarette CIGARETTE if they want.
In this case, people tend to ARE LIKELY TO (Avoid repetition) state that smoking is ...
People have changed their knowladge KNOWLEDGE to be MORE wisdom and it is going to beCOME guidline GUIDELINE for making THE better life.

OVERALL, YOU HAVE SHOWN THE BETTER PROGRESS
GOOD LUCK


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