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A Storm Wiped Out Power to An Entire State in Australia


PHA2016 39 / 62 4  
Sep 29, 2016   #1
For couple days, South Australia is still fighting with storm effect after power device had turned down. ABC News reported that power had been resuming at the center of Adelaide on Thursday while a thousand consumers are without electric supply and horrible weather expected recovery completely.

According to ABC, the storm destructed public facilities such schools, shops, and gas stations were closed. The government spoke that blackout cannot been prohibited. Official said force winds took out twenty two towers and tore down power lines. This dropped down many trees and rooftops ripped off buildings.

"This is an unprecedented event. Nobody has seen such a catastrophic failure of so much major infrastructure in any other part of the nation." ABC quoted from official South Australia.
BAMS14 18 / 29  
Sep 29, 2016   #2
ABC News reported(REPORTING) that power had been resuming (...) are without electricS supply and horrible weather ...

According to THE ABC, the storm destructedDESTRUCTING public facilities such ...

Official said, force winds took out...

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RAY93 35 / 186 136  
Sep 29, 2016   #3
For couple OF days,South Australia is still fighting with storm effect after power device had turned down.confusing and false information. South Australia is still fighting with severe storm effect of extreme weather WHICH HAS CAUSED black out/power device turning down

this is your sentence:

ABC News reported that power had been resuming at the center of Adelaide on Thursday while a thousand consumers are without electric supply and horrible weather expected recovery completely.

while in article its written:
According to the Australian Broadcasting Corp., power had resumed to much of the state capital Adelaide by Thursday morning local time, but tens of thousands of customers remained without electricity and more extreme weather was expected to complicate recovery

I can tell how similar both proved that you did not paraphrase it nor effectively summarizing the article. you only change several words there. this will not positively build your understanding in reading activity as well as in writing proficiency.

.., shops, and gas stations WHICH CAUSED THOSE PLACES were closed TO BE CLOSE. The government spoke that blackout cannot been prohibited BE AVOIDED.


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