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[IELTS Task 1] Strategic area for a new school in the town of Canterbury.


tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Aug 28, 2014   #1
The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


The map depicts the city planning in the town of Canterbury where are connected with two areas; Chartham and Sturry. There are three public zones; educational facility and infrastructural public transportation. Overall, there are two strategic areas which will be built a new school in the town of Canterbury.

To begin, 5km is the distance from Sturry to planned site for S1 with 7,000 populations. S1 area is located between Housing and Countryside zone. Moreover, the university can be seen in the northeast of the S1 area and in the west there is Town Centre. The main road connects from Town Centre to Sturry.

In any case, planned area for S2 is situated in Town Centre which is no traffic zone. S2 area, which has a population of 4,500, lies 7km from Chartham and running along from the S2 planned area to Chartham is main road. This area is covered by Housing and Countryside zone and university is located in the north of S2 site.




vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Aug 28, 2014   #2
Here are a few tips for better wording this essay:

The map depicts the city planning in the town of Canterbury where are connected with two areas ;

- where two areas are connected ...

there are two strategic areaswhich will be built a new school in the town of Canterbury.

- there are two strategic areas being considered for the building a ...

To begin, 5km is the distance from Sturry to planned site for S1 with 7,000 populations.

- There is a 5 km distance from Sturry to the planned... with a population of

S1 area is located between Housing and Countryside zone

- ... is located between the housing...

Moreover, the university can be seen in the northeast of the S1 area and in the west there is Town Centre. The main road connects from Town Centre to Sturry.

- The university can be seen in the Northeast of S1 with the Town Centre to the west. The main road connects the Town Centre to Sturry.

In any case, planned area for S2 is situated in Town Centre which is no traffic zone.

- The planned area... is situated in the Town Centre which is a no traffic zone.

I hope my advice will be beneficial for you. Overall, this is a very informative piece of writing that shows a clear understanding of the reading material provided. Good work :-)
YULIS 9 / 17 1  
Sep 19, 2014   #3
sir vangiespen, sometimes i didn't had any idea to explain any idea on task 2.but i'll try to revise my task 2 which is u correct it before.thank u sir
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Sep 20, 2014   #4
Hello, tiaDS

The map depicts the city planning in the town of Canterbury where are connected with two areas; Chartham and Sturry. There are three public zones; educational facility and infrastructural public transportation. Overall, there are two strategic areas which will be built a new school in the town of Canterbury.

You made a little mistake, please separate your overview with the introduction.

There are three public zones; educational facility and infrastructural public transportation

where is the place of the public zones ? I do think it should add in this sentence.

the university can be seen in the northeast of the S1 area and in the west there is Town Centre. The main road connects from Town Centre to Sturry.

Beware about the direction. You map depicting the university location is in the north-west of S1 and in the north of Town centre.


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