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My struggle with English Usage and Structure and conventions - Mandatory Education

chendorpg 1 / 8  
Oct 29, 2009   #1
Hi, I took my 4th Cbest test on Octuber 3, 2009. My average score is 29. I need help in "usage and "structure and conventions" Can anybody help.


EF_Kevin 8 / 13,334 129  
Oct 30, 2009   #2
Yes, submit some writing samples (as long as they do not appear anywhere else on the Internet).

I wonder if they mean sentence structure or the structure of the overall composition.

If you really want to improve, read some books by Dianna Hacker, and when you have questions post them here.

I look forward to seeing the ways you violate proper structure and conventions, and we'll try to help! :)
OP chendorpg 1 / 8  
Nov 1, 2009   #3
Hi, this is another writing essay example.

"Every year more and more computers are finding their way into the classroom. Discuss and explain your opinions on the growing use of computer-assisted instruction in the classroom".

The growing trend of computers in our lives has impacted our society, including our schools. The curriculum of our schools has been impacted by the use of these machines. They help students in different ways

Computers are very helpful for doing homework. Teachers, when assign homework relay on computers for assisting students. For example, a research paper can be done easier with the assistance of a computer. With...
OP chendorpg 1 / 8  
Nov 2, 2009   #4
Hi, I submitted two essays, I lost one and the other essay is still posted, but I have not received a critique. thanks
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,334 129  
Nov 3, 2009   #5
The growing importance of computers in our...

The trend does not grow, their importance grows.

If you want people to critique this, go give some ideas to others and ask them to do the same for you.

In the first paragraph, maybe you should say: In this essay, I will discuss (and then list the points you will make.

I think you should write a paragraph about how even more use of computers should be taking place in the classroom, because students will be entering the hi-tech world of 2015 and beyond. Things are changing fast, and education without computers is no longer able to be considered education.

You write well, but get it organized. Grab the attention with the first sentence, tell what the essay will include, use a paragraph for each point (you are doing this already), and then conclude with some final thoughts.
OP chendorpg 1 / 8  
Nov 9, 2010   #6

Mandatory Education

Should there be mandatory education in our society? Most definitely there should be public education because our children are our future so not to educate them would mean our generation to come would be uneducated, unskilled, and untrained.

First, uneducated individuals have many disadvantages such as not being able to read and write. We would have illiterate people in society. In fact, any job career depends on education and levels of education predict the type of work and pay involved. If there is no public education life is going to be harder...For example, in the past, there was discrimination, slavery, prevailed, people were kept ignorant, they didn't received an education, as a result, they didn't had opportunities to progress and were left illiterate. Therefore, is very important that society shall have mandatory public education.

Second, the future of society depends on the productivity of its people and if they are unskilled, they are going to be affected by it. As stated above, the level of education predicts the type of work and pay involved. These workers won't advance and could possibly affect them. For instance, farm workers and their families have had hardship working on the fields for many years because they lack of education and skills. This country must incorporate an educational system and skill to its people so they can be achievers and be successful.

Third, if there is not a system of education and training for the public they, will suffer. If only the elite can afford for an education and this will not be fair to the poor families. This like saying only the white collar families are entitled to be educated and trained because they would be the only who can afford to pay for an education, Lower and middle class wouldn't have that opportunity to prosper because they only make enough to sustain life. Society must have mandatory education and training for everybody, because society as a whole would suffer.

In conclusion, if there should be mandatory education in our society, absolutely is an obligation for our country has mandatory education to its citizens won't be able to prosper and they will have a bleak future. Uneducated, unskilled and untrained workers must have the proper education to have a prosper society and progressive future.

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