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IELTS Let students still have some challenges in art-based subjects, but not give mark on their work


Mica1988 1 / 1  
Mar 8, 2014   #1
Topic : Some educationalists argue that non-exam, arts-based subjects, such as music, drama, art and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary-school curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Art-based subjects, such as music, drama and art are likely to make a positive contribution towards student's academic performance. However, they are not necessary compulsory or to be graded by exam as long as students can have an opportunity to study through these art-based subjects.

It is generally thought that there might not be always faire grading on student's work in art-based subjects. Each of us has a certain preference in arts. In a domain of arts, teachers who have studied or researched some specific field that they were interested in during their university studies. It can be assumed that these art or drama teachers would have sort of specific preference as well as their vast knowledge in a range of arts. In that case, probably student's work or the end production are assessed based on teacher's studies background or preference. Unlike academic subjects, such as maths and language, the answer of exam in art-based subjects cannot be just correct or wrong. Teachers perception of student's production is a vital in evaluation and students therefore, cannot find his grade faire in some case.

Students who do not have confidence to speak or act in front of others claim that art-based subjects can discourage their academic performance and self-esteem. Obviously those who don't really enjoy expressing their creativeness or feelings can be enforced to act in a drama class. How horribly these students have to receive poor grades. This can have negative impact on their self- esteem and results in some shortcoming in students academic performance. To make matter worse, if some of them are also not good at maths or language, possibly they find themselves useless.

In my view, let students still have some challenges in art-based subjects, but not give mark on their work. Those who enjoy arts can improve their academic performance without exam in arts-based subjects. While others who are not good at in these subjects should not be hindered by acting uncomfortably in a class or receiving poor grade on their work.

MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
Mar 8, 2014   #2
However, they are not necessary compulsory or to be graded by exam as long as students can have an opportunity to study through these art-based subjects.

I wish you could include your own opinion in the introduction of your essay.

It is generally thought that there might not be always...

This paragraph is quite off-topic to me. I think you should focus on whether arts-based subjects should be compulsory instead of how teachers evaluate their students' performances.

In my view, let students still have some challenges in art-based subjects, but not give mark on their work.

Again, this is not aligned with the prompt given to you. Whether teachers should grade the work of students or not is not what the topic asks you to give your opinion about.
niesaysi 16 / 284 83  
Mar 9, 2014   #3
However, they are not necessarynecessarily compulsory..

It is generally thought that there might not be always faireno fair grading on student's work in art-based subjects.

n a domain of arts, teachers who have studied or researched some specific field that they were interested in during their university studies.

So? Complete the idea.

Teachers perception of student's production is a vital

To make matter worseSimilarly, if some of them are also not good atin maths or language, possibly they would find themselves useless.
OP Mica1988 1 / 1  
Mar 10, 2014   #4
Thankyou everyone all of your comments are very helpful.


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