What students with no full-time jobs did after finishing their courses in 2008 in the UK - IELTS 1

Bar charts about employment in the UK

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaveing college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts above give a brief statistical view of what graduate and postgraduate students with no full-time jobs did after finishing their courses in college in 2008 in the UK.

As can clearly be seen from the charts, the destination that most of these students landed on was further study, which nearly 30000 graduates chose to do and almost 3000 postgraduates did. Following right behind further study, part-time work was the second most chosen option by the UK seniors and post seniors, with approximately 18000 and 2500 students respectively. The number of uunemployed ones was fairly high among the graduates, which was 16235 students, closely equal to ones that took on part-time jobs. Meanwhile, this unfortunate option among postgraduates was quite low compared to the figure of those who chose to do part-time work and further study, around 1600 students. Predictably, the one which most students would not choose to do was voluntary work. Only 3500 graduates and 345 postgraduates did it.

To sum this up, the UK graduates and postgraduates are mostly out of full-time workforce due to further study, which will benefit the workforce after they are done with their studies. Meanwhile, even though the number of unemployed students was quite high, the ones that chose to do voluntary work were not that much.

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