I want to point out your introductory paragraph. Before we begin, There are some questions that you need to ask.
1. What is the purpose of 'introduction'?
>>Literally, introduction means that you-as a writer- rise an issue to the reader. So, the reader is aware what you're talking about.
2. Do you write your issue clearly?
So, what is the issue then?
Here, in your first paragraph (I suspect it as introduction paragraph), you already had a topic
Most of students think that laptop is the first thing that should they have to help their learning process at formal educations or non-formal educations
your topic is "the students think that having lapop is necessary for learning process", Am I right? or am I wrong?
At this point, even though you already gave a context(it's good), but your long sentence may make the readers loosing your point. The last point is that you have to remember is that you are in introduction - no need argument in introduction.
Here what I mean,
finishing their duty if to finish it needs laptop? Well, if they do not have laptop to be finishing their duty needs laptop they can go to warnet or they can borrow it with their friends.
question-answer, you give an argument.
No need to dive deep in introduction (deep analysis belongs to body section).