Maybe I didn't write the topic clear enough due to the word limit .
Well, you can include the full prompt in the post on top of your essay. Many other do that and it is very useful for us to align our comments with what your prompt requires :)
Yes, I think what I guessed your topic to be is wrong ...Now that I know and let see how I can contribute to improve your essay :)
The world 's economy has witnessed unprecedented boom in recent years . Such situation contributes to more employment opportunities in different cities .
Yes, now I see your sentences are well aligned with the prompt :)
Meanwhile , graduation students are often presented with two major paths to pave the ways for their future development , either to stay in their hometowns , living in familiar environment and hanging out with old friends , or to spread their wings in strange cities, experiencing different local life and meeting with new people .
This sentence is pretty long and it disturbs reader's concentration on your writing forcing him to remember lots of details to understand your idea.