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Students usually love a teacher with humor - he is closer to his students and teaches better


eating105 2 / 3  
Feb 19, 2011   #1
TOEFL: "a serious and strict teacher is more effective than a teacher with humor"

Hello, I'm Ellen, is a new comer overhere. I am preparing for TOEFL recently and I have a hard time writing an essay. Could you give me some advice about my essay and writing skills? Thanks a lot.

title: Do you agree or disagree a serious and strict teacher is more effective than a teacher with humor and is easygoing

When it comes to the topic, some people think students can get the best and the most efficient learning by a serious and strict teacher's teaching, but others dispute with that. In my opinion, I also disagree with that a serious and strict teacher is more effective than a teacher with humor and is easygoing.

On one hand, students usually love a teacher with humor and being easygoing because they are funny, close to students, full of creativity internally, and they are not bored like students' parents. Thus, a vivid teaching style is brought into school life by a teacher with these kind of characteristic. For example, Alice, the English teacher in my high school, is smart, humorous and kind. She always said that language is living, rather than dead, so the only way to become a bilingual naturally is learning second language through games. In her class, we read English teenager novels, enjoying the beauty of the literature. Even, we made a stage play in English. Alice really inspired our enthusiasm and great interest in learning language by her unique teaching. Hence, students can get the biggest benefits in studying when they meet a teacher whom they are easy to get along with.

On the other hand, a serious and strict teacher may induce students' fear and dislike, and this uncomfortable may push students to give up their studying. I had this experience when I was a child. My piano teacher is famous not only in her fantastic playing skills, but also in her cool training program. In order to make me be a good piano player, she asked every detail in playing piano, such as to practice for three hours every day, to strengthen and stretch my hand muscles by hold a pan, and tp knocking strongly over my fingers when playing with a wrong musical note. All things related playing piano became my nightmare gradually, so that I skipped the class and then stopped learning piano finally. Thus, it is possible to douse students' passions under the instruction of a serious and strict teacher.

From the discussion above, we know that teachers with different attitude in teaching really bring students totally different impacts. However, according to my two experience, I sincerely contradict that a serious and strict teacher is more effective than a teacher with humor and is easygoing.

KathyLala 20 / 116  
Feb 20, 2011   #2
I have some ideas for you Ting. Hope I can help a little

=>Some people think students can get...(Start your sentence from here is sound better)

=>students usually engage a teacher with...(change "love" to engage or "interest")

=>students usually engage a teacher with humor and being easygoing because he or she is funny, closed to students, and full of creativity internally; he or she is not bored like students' parents (a teacher = singular= he or she, they = plural. I really don't like "funny"; it sounds informal, you can choose different word)

=>...and they are not bored like students' parents (I don't understand why you compare "teacher" to "students' parents"? why not compare with other teachers, who are not smile until X-mas) (^_*)

Thus, a vivid teaching style is brought into school life by a teacher with these kind of characteristic (I like this sentence in active voice to emphasize your idea=>Thus, a teacher with these characteristics brings into his or her classroom an effective teaching style

=>For example, Mrs Alice, the English teacher in my high school...(I think you should have Mrs. or Miss in front of your teacher's name)

=>My piano teacher was famous not only in her fantastic playing skills

=>but also in her excellent training program (personally, I don't like to use "cool" in formal writing)

=> she required every detail in playing

=>...to strengthen and stretch my hand muscles by holding a pan, and to knock strongly over my fingers when playing with a wrong musical note OR"....by holding a pan. She often knocked (tapped?pinched?spanked?) so hard on my fingers when I was playing with a wrong musical note.

=>All these poor teaching methods had became my nightmare gradually

=>according to my two experiences, I sincerely contradict that a serious and strict teacher is more effective than a teacher with humor and is easygoing.
OP eating105 2 / 3  
Feb 25, 2011   #3
your suggestions is very helpful. Thank you^^
EF_Susan - / 2,365 12  
Feb 27, 2011   #4
Great suggestions here. You should challenge yourself! Try to type the essay and use Kathy's corrections. If you make another post, I will look to see if you still have errors.

This one is confusing:
On one hand, students usually love a teacher with humor and being easygoing because they are funny, close to students, full of creativity internally, and they are not bored like students' parents.

On one hand, students usually love a teacher with humor and being an easygoing attitude, because they are funny, close to students, and full of creativity internally, and also because they are not bored like students' parents.


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