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IELTS Task 2, Do the students pay the tuition fee by themselves, agree or disagree ?


watanabe 1 / 2  
Jan 5, 2016   #1
Many people believe that university students should pay tuition fees in full themselves, because they gain education for their own benefit and not for the society?

To what extent do you agree or disagree ?


These days, education plays an vital role in every society. A country can be successfully developed by a number of talented students. While many people claimed that students must pay tuition fees for their own knowledege and experience obtaining during their study. I personally believe that this educational expense is entirely responsible of the gorvenment.

First, it is true that education is crucial to the development of a country. When people today need to have a specific set of skills to survive in this competitive world as well as progress. This set of skills can be referred to as Education. Studying languages at school, for example, is far more popular as the globalisation is becoming increasingly interconnected , which demands an essential tool to communicate across culture develops. As a consequence, this may lead to the cultural exchange among nations being more easier.

Second, from the perspective of financial budget, some families cannot afford the expense for their children to pursue further education. Therefore it is a good solution when authoritied instutitions and gorverment should mainly take this responsiblity by granting the tuition for free for the students. This may enable to them study more effective. Furthermore, once the student received tuition fees for free, they are highly likely to focus more on their study. Students come from low-incomed family, for example, they may work for a living such as paying house, electric bills, foods beside studying. As a result, due to studing hard, student can obtain good qualifications and acquire useful knowledge from the universities.

In conclusion, I fully support the view that it is important to gorvenment take a duty towards students on paying fully tuition fees interms of the economic development, learner's budget and the qualifications of the students .

Please take a look over my essay. Thank you.
vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Jan 5, 2016   #2
Hoang, why are you discussing the responsibility of the government in sending people to school for free when the prompt is asking you to agree or disagree with the concept that the universities should not should any part of a student's tuition fee because the education they are receiving is meant to help the individual and not society in general? I believe that you totally misunderstood the prompt. The university does not represent the government in any way, shape, or form. You can actually use your current discussion only if the prompt specifically stated that you discuss government sponsored universities. In this case, that was not the prompt. Therefore, your whole essay failed to deliver the proper discussion for the prompt.

That said, your whole essay did not follow the prompt guidelines. Even your conclusion did not offer the correct information that could have saved your grade. If this were an actual IELTS test, the examiner will immediately notice the deviation from the prompt and score you with a failing grade. When you write an essay again for practice, make sure you understand the prompt requirements. While you are not yet taking the formal test, make sure to ask questions if you do not really understand the prompt. Otherwise, you are bound to repeat the same mistakes.
OP watanabe 1 / 2  
Jan 5, 2016   #3
@vangiespen : uhm.. I am a little confused now .

I have known that in the opinion essay, I should answer the question either agree or disagree or partly argree/disagree. So in this case, I completely disagree. But I just wonder that who is responsible for paying the tuition fee of the students?

In short, Can you help me to outline an essay ( Btw, is there any difference between essay and prompt ).

And If I completely disagree with the opinion, what should I write ?

Thank for your time and patience
vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Jan 5, 2016   #4
Here is the think Hoang, the prompt is not asking you who should pay for the tuition fee of the students because the belief that has to be discussed in the essay pertains to the belief that the students should pay their tuition fees in full by themselves. That means, no school scholarships, which is the usual way that students get the universities to sponsor their studies / tuition fees. The line of reasoning that you are asked to agree or disagree with is whether the students should pay their fees in full simply because they will not be paying back those fees in the future. They will graduate and then work for themselves. The university will in effect, lose money on these students because they basically study for free. The essay does not care about who should pay for the tuition fee if the school won't pay for it. If it was required in the discussion, then the prompt would have provided that question as well.

In answer to your question, the prompt is the question that you are given to discuss. The essay is the paragraph form of your thoughts and opinions written in relation to the prompt provided. Does that clarify the difference between the prompt and essay for you?

My outline for this essay would be:

1st paragraph - Introduction: Restate the prompt, points for discussion, and your opinion (agree or disagree)

2nd paragraph - Body 1: Opposing point of view discussion.

3rd paragraph - Body 2: Supporting point of view.

4th paragraph- Body 3: Your point of view discussion (agree or disagree)

5th paragraph- Conclusion: Summarize the topic discussed, points presented, and restate your opinion.

The outline defines the way that you should discuss your opinion and at what point in the essay. If you disagree with the opinion, then tell the reader why you think the universities should continue to pay tuition fees in full or in part for their students. Justify your opinion with evidence from your personal experience or published data.
OP watanabe 1 / 2  
Jan 9, 2016   #5
Hi vangiespen,

I highly appreciate your time and helps.
I will get in deeper those issues.

Many thanks !!


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