In today's world, a majority of prospective full-time university students are spending most of their time studying. Having said that, I completely agree they need to spend time doing other activities. This will be proven by looking at how physical wellbeing and family life are important along with education.[..]
In today's world, majority of prospective full-time university students are spending most of their time studying. Having said that(However), I completely agree( 0f the opinion that) they need to spend time doing other activities. This will(could) be proven by looking( taking a look) at how physical wellbeing and family life are important along with( as well as) education.
For one(instance), students need to spend time on physical activities(spending time on physical activities should also so be one of a student priorities). Let us take Shanghai as an example (For example,) Students in Shanghai are well known for their higher educational performances. This is demonstrated by the economic contribution from them to their country's benefit( This is demonstrated by their effortless contribution to their country's economic development). The drawback here is that (Unfortunately,)these students are becoming obese by spending most of their time studying, and not doing any sports. Thus, as can be clearly seen from my example there is a need of physical exercises as well( Thus, it can be clearly seen that physical exercise will be of greater benefit to student than it can be imagined).
In addition, students need to concentrate on family relations( long distance studying have created less interpersonal relationships between family members). For instance, in America, students often traverse longer distances and live at student residences in order to commit to full-time studies. This leads to damages in their family relations. Living with family allows them to have a sense of empathy and makes them become responsible. This makes it clear why students need to indulge in other activities as well as in education.
In conclusion, after looking at how important physical health and relations are in students' lives; it has now been proven that students need to spend time on other activities as well. Doing that gives them better health and strengthens their relationship to their families.
I made some corrections . The essay is concise and short. You may need to explain your examples further to give a broader view.
Physical fitness, activities, self discipline, moral development, cooperation - study PE at school?
I think students should do so but can you help me with the ideas provided about
-Improve physical fitness
-Provide regular, healthful physical activities
-Teach self discipline
-Influence moral development, leadership, cooperate with others.
Please Help Me. I have to finish this by tomorrow.
Thanks all !!!
I need for a argument essay.
these activities are most important for every age of human
you want to support it or criticize it?? i mean what do u need argument for??