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An IELTS task 2 essay about whether studying history is important


englishlearner1 1 / 2  
Mar 19, 2011   #1
Topic: Some people think studying the past has little value in the modern world. Why do you think it is important to do so? What will be the impacts on children if they are not taught history?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


History to some people could be not very interesting and studying the subject will not help to understand the value of modern world. However, it is generally believed that learning from the past can provide important skills and knowledge that we need for our modern lives and not teaching history to children might cause several negative impacts on them.

To begin with, the most important point of studying the past is that learning about other historical periods gives insights into different ways of life. In particular, we can have some ideas of how people lived in different periods in the past: how they did the agriculture and what forms of transportation which were most common used in different periods.

Next, learning about conflicts in the past can help us to avoid them in future. History texts provide explanations for the situations which caused conflicts in past. Hence, studying history helps to prevent most of the factors that may lead to fights in future. Similarly, if the situations we face today are identical to those happened in the past, we could have explanations and probably solutions for them.

As the final point of the significances of studying past events, it is generally believed that studying history involves investigating and interpreting evidences or information hence critical thinking is developed. As a consequence, if children are not taught history at school, they might have lack of ability to collect and evaluate data and to think logically in order to make good decisions. In addition, if children are not given some interesting assessments like going to a local archaeological site to make a poster about local history, they would have no motivation or interest on doing research in later years of their lives.

To sum up, despite the fact that there are some people might think studying the past is boring and useless as it brings little value to modern life, I strongly think that it is not just important but almost compulsory for us to study history as it helps to develop critical thinking skills and doing research skills which are two very important skills that we need for living and working.

Borislav 6 / 20  
Mar 20, 2011   #2
To sum up, despite the fact that there are some people who think studying the past is boring and useless as it brings little value to modern life, I strongly believe that it is not just important but almost compulsory for us to study history as it helps to develop critical thinking skills and doing research skills which are two very important skills that we need for living and working.

Hey, I have no idea how you could think strongly. It sounds weird :) And maybe that sentence is too long. A reader could get confused. Nevertheless, it`s a pretty good essay I would say. The exact structure, at-the-point examples. The only thing that annoys me is the excessive usage of transitions. Don`t feel obligated to start every next sentence with transitional word. One in the beginning of the paragraph is more than enough. But this is my opinion, maybe it`s worth some of the more experienced users to contribute to the topic. Just in my view it`s like you have learned all the words from a book and now you throw them here and there.

But the important thing is that you have clear thought and good grammar. Way to go :)
OP englishlearner1 1 / 2  
Mar 20, 2011   #3
Hi Borislav, your comment is helpful and encouraging. Thank you for replying me and providing good correction.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Mar 22, 2011   #4
History to some people could be not very interesting, and they believe that studying the subject will not help to understand the value of modern world. ---I added a few words so that it would be a little better.

I think you are doing very well! You can make the style of writing sound more natural if you just read some excellent literature every day.

To sum up, despite the fact that there are some people might think studying the past is boring and useless as it brings little value to modern life, I strongly think that it is not just important but almost compulsory necessary for us to study history as it helps to develop critical thinking skills and doing research skills, which are two very important skills that we need for living and working.

:-)


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