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Summarise the information of two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010


shureoni 1 / -  
Jun 29, 2019   #1

The maps illustrated the way to approach a city hospital in 2 different years.


Through this map, it can be easily seen that there was a remarkable development of this area. Except for the stabilization of city hospital campus and Ring Road, underlying features are intersection and parking spaces changes.

From 2007 to 2010, two roundabouts were added. One is located at the three-way junction of the hospital road and the Ring Road, while the second one is situated at the four-way intersection of the hospital road and the city road. This sensible arrangement helped generate the flow of traffic and alleviate accident proportion of this place.

The second change improving the visibility of this road was the parking lot and bus space. In 2007, both staff and public had their rights to park, three years later that parking space was divided into two spaces, one to the right of hospital road for employees and one in front of the hospital gate for public. Three bus stops were substituted for a bus station leading to both two roundabouts to facilitate citizens' needs.

Maria [Contributor] - / 1,047 372  
Jun 29, 2019   #2
@shureoni
Hi there!

Welcome to the forum. I hope you find the feedback you're looking anywhere here. Next time, it would be beneficial for us to be given the maps that you are trying to interpret to give us more information about the topic.

Your writing is clear and straight to the point - both traits that I often look for when dissecting these types of essays. I would only suggest that you try to have a more logical, step-by-step approach to writing. What this pertains to would be focusing more on the particular details, creating more depth and appreciation for the flow of your content.

Furthermore, it would also be beneficial to the writing if you can abide by the fundamental grammatical roles that are imposed. Try rereading your reference materials to help you in this.

Best of luck as always.


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