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IELTS Writing Task 1 Summary Article: Ancient Bee fosil reveals secrets of human ancestor's habitat


Alamsyah Ismail 24 / 43  
Sep 29, 2016   #1
Australopithecus well-known as The Taung Child found in 1924 revolutioned our view of human origins. It provided as human evolved in Africa, not Eurasia as previously thought. Recently, a fossilised bee's nest reveals an insight into original place in which that early human lived more 3 million years ago. It precisely thought that Taung Child was unearthed in the remains of small cavern as the rocks containing the skull appear similiar to cave-formed limestones.

According to Philip Hopley from University of London, all other south African hominis come from cave sediment formed within a ilk of limestones, Precambrian. And he said that the Taung Child was preserved at approximately 2,8 million-years-old surface soil.

The conclution said that it raises hope of future fossil discoveries at Taung. The search for more hominin fossis has focused on the immediate area around where the Taung Chid was found, because of the assumption that the fossil formed in a relatively small limestone chamber.

source: newscientist.com/article/2107441-ancient-bee-fossil-reveals-secrets-of-human-ancestors-habitat/

Vina12 1 / 2  
Sep 29, 2016   #2
Hi Alamsyah Ismail
I have some advice for you

- ...The Taung Child found in 1924 revolutionedrevolutionized our view of human origins.
- ...the remains of [the] small cavern as the rocks containing the skull...
- ...all other south African hominishominids come from cave sediment formed within aan ilk of limestones, Precambrian
- The conclutionconclusion said that it raises hope of future fossil...
- The search for more hominin fossisfossils has focused on...

Thankyou
Hope this will be helpful :)
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Sep 29, 2016   #3
Hi Nura, as I was going through your summary essay, I must say you did a well managed essay that definitely covered all the necessary points to convey the message of the discovery as well as as the vital information are properly placed in a logical order.

Though, there are a few modifications to be done as you can see from the above suggestions, however, minor, this remarks are very important in enhancing the essay and make it stronger.

For the last paragraph, conclution - is spelled conclusion , you see, as minor as spelling mistakes can create a negative note on your essay so be sure to turn on your spell checker at all times and for future writing reference, make sure that you practice writing more and reading will also help in expanding your vocabulary so read on.


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