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adip 12 / 13  
Aug 18, 2016   #1
Alexa Meade talks about your biological is her canvas , due to the fact that She forms an Acrylic painting of such a male,yet does not utilize canvas as media. She painted it immediately on top of the man when she wants to make a portrait, painting it on a real object, to make it apparent with a two-dimensional painting, and it is able to photograph it from any angle. Actually, the portrait does not need either people or paint until the light changed and all of sudden. However, this brought a difficult to keep on flickering before her eyes. She had turned her friends into painting and then cart them back to a painting. Sometimes, she hopes to bring folks down to her studio and show them that she spent his days in a basement, putting paint and toast. She has so much fun with this process, usually, she has the idea of creating a painting from some side because he could have a very specific image.

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kobayakawa07 8 / 13  
Aug 18, 2016   #2
Hello adip, It's nice to know you here. Your summary is pretty good. It is well-structured. It has good pattern too. Here my analysis:

-Alexa Meade talks about your biological is her canvas. Actually, I don't get the point of this statment since you mention "biological" which is adjective. I think you can add some noun, such as "body" or "face" after "biological

-She painted it immediately on The top of the man when she wantswanted to make a portrait, painting ...
I think you should use past tense since the first phrase is "past condition"

-Sometimes, she hopeshoped to bring folks down to her studio and showed them that she spent hisher days in a basement, ...
I find that you aren't consistent to use tenses. I think it's better if you make those phrases to simple past sentences. In addition, don't forget to use "her" to change "she"

Thank you very much adip. I hope we can learn english together.
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Aug 18, 2016   #3
Hi Adi, here's my take on your summary;

- Alexa Meade talks about yourour biological features is her canvas ,
- due to the fact that She forms anthis is evident in her Acrylic painting
- of such a male,yet she does not utilize canvas as media.
- She painteds it immediately on top of the man when she wants to make a portrait,
- and it is able to photographtherefore she's able to capture it from any angle.
- the light changed and all of suddens .
- However, this brought ais difficult to keep on flickering lights before her eyes.
- She has so much fun within this process,
- some side because hea different angle and could have a very specific image.

There you have it Adi, overall, the summary is quiet confusing, your sentences are very jammed up, I believe you have the idea in your head, however, you were not able to formulate or construct a well structured essay.

I hope this revision helps.
akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Aug 18, 2016   #4
HI Adi..
this is one of the good summaries because I get the information clearly. However, I am going to give you a few of suggestion to develop the better summary.

Please, read the notes below.

Alexa Meade talks TALKED about your biological OF A MAN is her canvas , due to the fact ...
She painted it immediately (...) to make a portrait, painting it on a real object, to . THE ARTIST makeS it apparent with a two-dimensional painting, and it is able to photograph it from any angle (IT IS SO LONG. IT WILL MAKE THE READER CONFUSED) . Actually, the portrait does DID not need ...

She has so much fun HAD GOT JOY with this process, . usually, she ALEXA has the idea of creating ...

Note: Adi, you sometimes write some words for some time. It seems repetitive. Following that, be careful of the complex sentence. Perhaps, the readers realize that you have the high skill of the grammar, it can make the readers confused. You should reread your summary, so you know whether it does not make them misconceive.

OVERALL, IT IS A GOOD JOB


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