TED Summary : The Beauty of Human Skin in Every Color by Angelica Dass

Angelica Dass presented about the beauty of human skin in every color. For the beginning, she shared about her family background which comes from a variation skin color. Her father has a dark chocolate tone, her grandma has a porcelain skin, and her mother has a cinnamon skin with a pinch of hazel and honey. For the next section, she told about how people think about her skin and also how she got discrimination in her school. Actually she has a brown skin, but her friends said it was a black and it made Angelica confuse about the situation. And also when she entered the party, every single person decided that she was the maid and it made her sadness. However, she was forgetting about the bullying that she got and tried to make a project which utilizes people together to ignore about their skin color. Many people support her project and she becomes the one of inspiring women to be against about skin color.

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At the end, she receives the supports to her project from many people and she becomes one of the inspiring women against the skin color distinction