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Summary an Article Best Trails to People Who Do Not Like Hiking


Faridadwi18 67 / 104 13  
Aug 18, 2016   #1
Many people do not like to hike a mountain because it takes much times and extra effort also dangerous on the way up. That is why right now many people look for a short hike so that they do not need to spent much time but can see extravagant landscape while exercises. This is 10 best places to people who like short hikes. The first place is in Rifugio Bonatti, Italy, it is only 11.3 km and people can enjoy Mount Blanc massif view. The second place is in Island Peak, Nepal, people need to walk 56 to 65 km to reach himalayan peak. Ireland is the next destination. It is only 3 to 6.5 km and people can see a romp in the heart of the wild Irish countryside. Aoraki or Mount Cook National Park, New Zealand also great destination to go. By walking 4.8 km for round-trip, people can see New Zealand's Southern Alps at a glacial lake. In France Les Dentelles de Montmirail is a beautiful limestone fins. Lassen Peak Trail in California is a massive stratovolcanoes and can be reached by walking for about 8 km round-trip. Black Canyon also is a famous place to hike and the access is easy. Japan has many places to hike, one of them is Mount Takao. People who want very short walk can go to Outer Banks, North Carolina or Solheimajokull, iceland. Only less than 3 km people can enjoy a great views.

Link : nationalgeographic.com/adventure/activities/hiking-and-backpacking/best-trails-10-easy-hikes/

akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Aug 18, 2016   #2
Hi Farida.
I appreciate your effort because you wanna provide your time to improve your English. Let me give you suggestions to develop this.


because it takes much times and AN extra effort also dangerous on the way up.
That is why right now many A LARGE NUMBER OF people look for (...) do not need to spent SPEND much time but can ...
This is THESE ARE 10 best places to FOR people who like THE short hikes.
... Rifugio Bonatti, Italy, . it is only 11.3 km, and people THOSE (THOSE CAN BE USED AS PEOPLE) can enjoy Mount ...
... Island Peak, Nepal, WHERE people need to walk 56 to 65 km to reach A Himalayan peak.
... National Park, New Zealand also THE great destination to go ...


Note: You still fall down some same errors. First, you have strayed the use of the article. Following that, you always write some words repetitively (PEOPLE AND MANY). I do not know why I get bored when I read the last six sentences. It seemed like the list of the data. Please, you harness appropriate linking words, so the readers can find a sense of your summary.

keep spirit...
I am looking forward to meeting your summary..
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