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TED Summary - How to Build Good Life


Ucha MSN 17 / 26 4  
Nov 10, 2016   #1
Tai Lopes gave a lecture about why people are required to read a book a day. At the beginning of his speech, he described how to get a good life such as health, happiness, and love. In fact, everybody wants something, but not all of them get it.

Next, he presented three major factors that may influence a good life. Those are tutor, media, and book. Mentors have an important position as a role model for their followers. They may help people to experience their work. The Second is media which has treated us. It tries to show us many things to be learned. And the last is book. Book is modern system in learning that provided us many information and education.

Lopes suggested collecting book approximately 150 titles. We need to deem those books as friend so we can enjoy it. He also opined that there is no specific rule on how to read it. How quickly we read, how many pages, and how many days are not required, but it is better to read one book a week. It is noticeable that everybody wants a good life, but not everybody is willing to read to get it.

mem77 62 / 98 6  
Nov 10, 2016   #2
Dear Ucha MSN, here some advice from me and feel free to correct me too!

In fact, everybody wantswanted something, but not all of them getgot it.

... may influence a good life for people.

Those are were a tutor, ...

The Second iswas media which hashad treated us.

It triestried to show us many...

And the last iswas book.

Book iswas modern system in learning method that provided us ...

Regards
Hujjatul19 45 / 70 3  
Nov 10, 2016   #3
Dear Ucha, I have some suggestions for you

to read aone book in a day.

In fact, everybody wants something, but not all of them get it.
you may say
Everyone wants it all yet factually they do no effort to gain it.

Next, he presenteds three major (...) a good life. Those, they are tutor, media, and book. Firstly,Mentors have an ...

The Ssecond is media which hasve treated us. It tries toand show us many ...
And the last is book. Bookthat is a modern system in learning that providedes us many informations and educations.

Best Regards
Abrahamlincoln 54 / 56  
Nov 10, 2016   #4
Hello My Friend
Let me give you some advices

Tai Lopes gave a lecture about why [...] something, but not all of them get it.

(Dear Ucha, in this sentence, you need to explain why people are compulsory to read at least one book a day, you can start it with explanation regarding its benefits to human life. if you describe hot to get a good life previously, it jumps your mind idea)

Next, he presented three major (mind/predominant) factors that may influence (a good life.
Mentors have animportant positionas a role model ...They give people opportunity to apply their theory in the real situation . may help people to experience their work.

... in learning that provided us numerous information and education. insights.

Good Luck
eve01 24 / 40 5  
Nov 10, 2016   #5
hi ucha
here is my notes for you

I like your article anyway because I've ever seen this video, and I love it. I would concern on third paragraph, I think you are missing the contents, you only explained 'read'. but you forgot two others kinds of them, about tutor and media. those related with it also. you can describe like you tell about the functions of reading anymore.

... read one book a week.It is noticeable that everybody wants a good life, but not everybody is willing to read to get it.---> your statement jumps after u wrote "How quickly we read, how many pages, and how many days are not required, but it is better to read one book a week." I mean you need more detail why this happens ?before come to the 'good life' . The point is you didn't put the reasons (why) but directly the negative result. Perhaps you can convey your writing with cause-effect, it would be appropriate.

hope it helps :)


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