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IELTS Summary 6: Carrie Green-Programming your mind for success (TED)


dils 20 / 33 2  
Sep 18, 2016   #1
Carrie Green, founder of Female Entrepreneur Association, stated that the most common reasons that stop the people to reach out what they desire are fear, obstacle, and lack of motivation. Self-limiting thought and procrastination restrict the people from make the most of their available opportunities. In keeping with that, it is clearly seen that what we are thinking about impacts our behavior.

Became aware about what's on mind is the first step to program our mind for success. After that, learn to replace the negative thoughts with the positive and empowering mind. The last, don't forget to believe in, it helps us to endure the hard situations. Over all, being mindful and positive are the key points for success.

Wolf Larsen - / 127 47  
Sep 18, 2016   #2
Hello

I think your text will be improved rather substantially, if you apply the following adjustments to it:

of [...]the [...] Female Entrepreneur Association...
stop the people to reach [...] from reaching out... and [...] the [...] lack of motivation.
thoughts and... restrict the people from [...] makes it quite impossible for the affected individuals to take full advantage of the available opportunities in life.
what we are thinking about impacts [...] our thoughts do affect the manner in which we address life challenges.
Became [...] Becoming [...] aware [...] of what shapes the workings of our psyche is the first step on the way of attaining social prominence.
After that [...] One will also need to learn how to suppress his of her negative thoughts, as the important precondition for becoming an empowered person.

The last [...] Finally, we need to have a strong belief in our ability to tackle the problems of life, because it will help us...

I hope this came of help. Regards.


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