When she is chosen as a Hijabi model, a model who wears veils to cover her head and hair, represents the way a muslimah gets dressed, Mariah Idrissi believes that something small is able to give major impacts as the people around her start questioning her decision. How do you feel?, how is your parent's response? why women (muslimah) are forced to wear hijab?, why do men make you wear hijab?, why you are pressed but still follow the religion?, Is there something wrong with the fashion industry?, are the common bizarre questions she deals with.
Mariah comes up with a logical explanation that a muslimah who wears hijab is not a representation of pressure. By wearing hijab, she is still able to be her own self. Hijab is not a limitation in doing positive activities. She highlights that she does not need the validation of Social Media or others regarding her appearance. Hijab is the way of beautifying women in Islam as well as a part of today's fashion industry.
Source: youtube.com/watch?v=1CJThRWoXt4
Hello Fitri12
I have a twice advice to you, please pay attention if you wish
that something small is able to give major impacts
.......that something smal be able to give major
impacts as the people around her start questioning
.........collocation of impact with on/to
hi..
i just want to give slight suggestion for you..
represents[representing] the way a muslimah gets dressed,
>> because you mentioned it in the first sentence, it has to be gerund..
thanks.. i hope it helps..
Hi Fitri12,after reading your summary, i have some suggestions, perhaps useful for you.
1.When she waschosen as a Hijabi model-----> past tense.
2.that a muslimah whowhom wears hijab is
3.By wearing hijab, she is still able to be her own self.
Hai Fitri12
You've done well, but there are several inputs for you.
... head and hair,.rR epresents the way a muslimah gets dressed, Mariah Idrissi believes that something small action is able to give major (...) around her that start questioning her decision.
By wearing hijab, she is still able to be her own self.
She highlights??? that she does not need (...) or others regarding for her appearance. Hijab is the way of beautifyingbeauty of women in Islam ...
When she is chosen as a Hijabi model,
a model who[repetition] wearing veils to cover ...
you may write : when she is chosen as a Hijabi model wearing veils to cover her head and her hair in order to represent the way a muslimah gets dressed, ......
How do you feel?, how is your parent's [...] bizarre questions she deals with.
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