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Summary Article Children : Leave them Alone


Faridadwi18 67 / 104 13  
Aug 25, 2016   #1
Alison Gopnik is a developmental psychologist and writer and Paula Flass is social historian. Two of them agree that parent should not "over-parent" or manage children too details. Parent have to stop arranging children activities and expecting big things from their kids also let them trough their own life with their way. Gopnik wrote in her book The Gardener and the Carpenter and told people that "parent should be like gardeners, tending young shoots and providing fertile ground. Instead, many resemble carpenters, chiselling away at them to create an image of success that has little to do with their kids' wishes, talents or needs". By this way, kids can adapt in this unpredictable world. By making full schedule for the children it means parent rob the essential growth of their children. Flass also believe if the parent worry too much and always provide anything for their kids, they can not be an independent person and difficult to survive in the future.

Link : newscientist.com/article/mg23130874-500-the-kids-are-alright-if-you-leave-them-alone/

rosadesiana 38 / 40 2  
Aug 25, 2016   #2
... and expecting big things from their the kids andalso let them trough their own life with their way discover their life.

- has little to do with their kids' ==> something to do

- kids can adapt in this unpredictable world. ==> kids will have adaptability skills to survive in modern world.

-By making full schedule ==> by arranging a lot of schedule
ashelarisa48 36 / 52 4  
Aug 25, 2016   #3
Dear Ida, this is a bit correction in your essay. Hope it helps.

Alison Gopnik is a developmental psychologist andalso a writer and Paula Flass is a social historian.
Two of them agree that parent should not be overprotective"over-parent" or manage their children too details.

Gopnik wrote in her book, The Gardener and the Carpenter, and told people that "parent should be acting aslike gardeners, tending young ...
swr10 10 / 16 2  
Aug 25, 2016   #4
Dear Mr Faridadwi18,

I want to give you some suggestions.

- ... psychologist and writer, andwhile Paula Flass is a social historian.
- Two of themThey ....
- Gopnik wrote in her book, " The Gardener and the Carpenter" and told people that " parent should be like gardeners.....
- Flass also believes .....
ekalamarsyari11 72 / 108 9  
Aug 25, 2016   #5
... developmental psychologist and a writer and Paula Flass ...
using two "and" in a sentence could lead confusion

Alison Gopnik is a developmental psychologist and a writer while Paula Flass is a social historian

Parents have to stop ...

kids can adapt in to this unpredictable world.

By making full schedule for the children it means parent rob ...

and always provide anything every thing for their kids


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