Summary: Chinese Anti-Corruption Activists on Trial for "Disturbing Public Order"

This incident occured about two years ago when two activists on anti-corruption from China demanded transparancy every government official in respect of their private wealth in front of public. The Activists were judged disturbing public order due to these actions. Therefore, They were convicted to five years in jail. Beside of that, before the activists convicted, there was one of politician from the communist party who convicted also.

A huge number of people argued that the activists had been treated unfairly, because people felt no disturbed by the action of activists and their followers. Otherwise, Society felt their demands to government representated by the activiests. People certainly wanted new era on their nation's life. At that time, The government was persepted nothing to do their primary duties for service society. The corruption problems were being become extra ordinary crime which had to be erased from their country.

hallo Firman,
i have corrected your writing, and i have suggestions

1. at this sentence: "This incident occured about two years ago" should be "The incidents, was occured for two years ".

2. at this sentence: "t he government was perseptedpresented nothing to do their primary ..."

3. at this sentence: "The corruption problems were being becomes extra ordinary crime...

thank you, wish it useful. keep writing ^^

Hii firman,

Here my suggestion for your text.
You have some misspelling words on text such as:

O ccured = occurred
Transpare ncy
Representa ted
a ctivie sts = activists
Persepted = presented

You can re-write your sentence to make it simple -> ..... when two activists on anti-corruption from China ... =.......when two anti-corruption activists demanded transparency to the government's officials toward their personal assets in public.

At that time, Tt he government.....