Contact lenses are very popular right now. Many people wear it because it makes their appearance more stylish and simple to use. However, there are some harmful effects of using contact lenses if people wear it in improper way. The impacts can lead to serious eye infections and long-term damage. Over the last ten years there were a report from FDA (Food and Drug Administration) if almost one in five contact lenses cause eyes infections. The newest report comes from CDC ( Centers For Disease Control and Prevention), they reported that many people get a scarred cornea so that they need a corneal transplant. "People have to wear it in a safe way and cared it by asking for a recommendation from a doctor because improper wear and care can cause eyes infections" said Michael Beach, director of CDC's Healthy Water Program. People who use contact lenses have to use fresh solution to clean the lenses and replace it often also do not use it when they go to sleep.
Link : time.com/4459189/contact-lenses-cdc-infection/
Hi faridadwi18
I have some suggestions for you. I hope it will help you to develop your writing skill.
Many people wear it because it makes their appearance ... ----> too much "it"
you can use Many people wear the lenses because it makes their appearance more stylish and simple to use
fresh solution ----> other alternatives
tyar32
Hallo Farida,
Contact lenses are very popular recently . The reason why people wear this accessories is that it makes their appearance more stylish.Also, it is simple to use. However, there are some harmful effects on using contact lenses improperly .
Over the last ten years,need commathere were a report fromFood and Drug Administration (FDA) reported thatif almost one in five contact lenses wearing cause eyes infections. Also, the newest report comes from CDC ( Centers For Disease Control and Prevention) confirmed that most individuals get a scarred cornea after have in lenses . As a result, they need a corneal transplant.
hiii, here is my paraphrase for your essay
However, there are some harmful effects of using contact lenses if people wear it in improper way >> Be that as it may, there are some hurtful impacts of utilizing contact focal points if individuals wear it in ill-advised way
( Centers For Disease Control and Prevention), do not use space after parenthesis
that's all, thankssss ;)
Hi Farida, below are my thoughts on your essay.
- and it's simple to use.
- lenses, if people wear it in an improper way.
- there were a reports from FDA (Food and Drug Administration)
- if almostthat one in five contact lenses cause eyes infections.
- so that they need a corneal transplant.
- and replace it often also, they shoulddo not use it when they go to sleep.
There you have it Farida, I believe your summary is as it is very comprehensive and straight to the point.
I just notice that, you still have to work on minor details of your sentences such as the tenses and the punctuation
marks, this minor details complete the sentences and without them, the overall outcome of the essay may not be that meaningful.
I hope the insights and corrections help and practice more often.
Contact lenses are very popular renowned right now recently. (popular is too common, you can use august or renowned)
their appearance more stylish and IT IS simple to use
... to clean the lenses and replace it often also do not use it when ...(we cannot use also to join two sentences, we use also to add extra opinion to things that we have already said)
People who use contact lenses have to use fresh solution to clean the lenses and replace it often. Also do not use it when they go to sleep
