In the past, perhaps most of people just knew facebook to post their photo or video. Neverthless, since instagram appear many years ago a lot of people thought better post their photo in instagram. Because instagram had many advantages feature which didn't has other social media. Until now, approximately 500 milion people joined to instagram, it was one of the most enormous user of social media right now. Recently, facebook which owned instagram announce regarding new feature of instagram. With that feature retailer can post their products and if user like their product just click the photo and will shows about price and how to order. It's new model of commerce, and is probably success. The company also revealed about advertiser in instagram almost 500.000 and gradually increase.
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Hi Alfin,
I would like to share my insights towards your article summary.
- In the past, perhaps(I think that "uncertainty" like this is not supposed to be a language that is used in article) most of people just knew F acebook to post their photos or videos.(name, should be in capital form)
- Nevertheless , since Instagram appeared many years ago, a lot of people thoughtthinkthat it is better to post their photosinonInstagram.
- This is because Instagramhadhave many advantages features which didn't has other social media do not have .
- Until now, approximately 500 million people have joined toInstagram . (stop here, new sentence)Itwasis one of the social media which has themost enormouslargest user of social media right now.
What you can learn is that even though you mention "past event", you are not obliged to write all of them in past tense. This is because the fact in the past and the fact in present is similar. For example, if you said that lots of people think that instagram was the best place last year, it means instagram is not the best place this year. Thus, if the fact is quite similar or the same to present time signal, just mention it in present form.
Hope this helps :)
Hi Alfin, please find additional suggestions below;
- Neverthe less, sinceas instagram appeared many years ago
- a lot of people thought it is better to post their photo inon instagram.
- Because instagram had manyIt has more advantages feature which didn't hasthat other social media didn't have .
- Until nowAs we speak , approximately 500 milion
- it washas one of the most enormous
- number of users onof social media right now.
- Recently, facebook whichwho ownsowned instagram announce regardinga new feature of instagram. - With thatthis feature retailer can post their
- products and if user like their product just click the photo and it will shows aboutthe price and how to order.
- ..., and is probably a success.
- The company also revealed about advertiser inthe advertising feature of instagram almost (...) increases .
There you have it Alfin, with this summary essay, I actually learned something and I thank you for that. It's always a good thing to learn something everyday.
