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Summary TED Why By Feeling You Are Ugly Is Bad For You.


Faridadwi18 67 / 104 13  
Aug 29, 2016   #1
Many teenagers think that the appearance will give a big influence in their live. Ten thousands people every month google "Am I Ugly". This leads to depression for teenagers. Most of these teenagers looking for an inspiration from magazine like proana, bikini bridge which use zero size model to be their brand ambassadors. It makes them think that beautiful appearance is by having thin body for women. Most of girls are now choosing not to do something because they don't think they look good enough. They have low self-esteem which lead them to damage their health. People also always judge others by they look not what they are doing. According to the research, the way to change this culture is by their family, friends and relationship. The second way is media and celebrity culture and the last way is working together between government and communities. By doing this, people can encourage teenagers to have positive self-esteem so that they have confidence to do many things in their lives.

Link : ted/talks/meaghan_ramsey_why_thinking_you_re_ugly_is_bad_for_you

Fadhilahumar91 61 / 73 6  
Aug 30, 2016   #2
hi farida...

Most of these teenagers are looking for an (...) proana, bikini bridge (your sentence without verb)

... now choosing not to do something(please avoid to use "something", so general)

People also always judge others by theytheirlook cover not what they are doingtheir attitudes . According to the research,

I suggest you, please check : youtube.com/watch?v=eGWO1ldEhtQ

thank you
daya93 4 / 6 1  
Aug 30, 2016   #3
Hi Farida,

Ten thousands people every month google "Am I Ugly". This leads to depression for teenagers. I think your sentences are uncorrelated each other.

Actually, your summary is bad in content, I could not take the messages here. My suggestion is while watching TED highlight some point which are interesting and try to rewrite again in writing sentences, not based on what speakers say on literal.

It would be more useful for you :)

Good luck!


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