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Summary - Al-Gore New thinking on the climate crisis


Dipa19 8 / 13  
Aug 11, 2016   #1
Still about the Climate crisis, Al Gore said that the Environtmental challenges fall into three categories: air pollution, water pollution, hazardous waste dumps and also the acid rain. He said that we need a world wide global mobilization for renewable energy, conservation efficiency and a global transition to allow carbon economy. He show us that the last 28 years, the Global warming made the snow on North Polar Ice Melting, puts a lot of preassure on Greendland, The Lake Linier has dry and in fact, the green land of Bolivia on 1975 has changes to be a fullness city on 2003. We have a planet emergency and we have to find a way in our generation a sense of generation mission on the great challenges to set aside the cause of distraction and rise to the challenge that the history is presenting to us. He said that we ought to approach this challenge with a sense of profound joy. we have to safe the human future. He said that we have the capacity to do that. Let's do it!
akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Aug 12, 2016   #2
Hi Dipa..
Welcome to Essay Forum..
I have read your writing closely. There are some of errors grammatically. I will give you a few suggestion.I hope you practice again and gain.

Happy writing....

THIS SUMMARY IS Still about the Climate crisis. Al Gore said that the Environt mental (BE CAREFUL FOR MISS SPELLING) challenges fall into three categories: air pollution, water pollution, hazardous waste dumps and also the acid rain (WHAT DO YOU MEAN. WHY HAVE YOUD MENTIONED FOURS WHEREAS YOU HAVE STATED THAT IT HAS THREE CATEGORIES) . He said that we need a world wide global mobilization WIDELY IN THE WHOLE WORLD for renewable energy, conservation efficiency ...

He showS us that the last 28 years, (...) puts a lot of prea ssure on Greendland, The Lake Linier has dry and in fact, the green land of Bolivia on 1975 has changes to be a fullness city on 2003 (YOU SHOULD REWRITE THIS SENTENCE AS IT HAS MADE READERS CONFUSED. YOU CAN HARNESS CONJUNCTION) . We have a planet emergency and wehave to find a way in our generation a sense of generation mission on the great challenges to set aside the cause of distraction and rise to the challenge that the history is presenting to us (YOU REWRITE AGAIN. THIS SENTENCE IS REALLY MESSY).

... sense of profound joy. we have to safe SAVE (TO + V1) the human future.

NOTE: YOU PAY ATTENTION TO VERB AGREEMENT.


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