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Article Summary: Guardian; Cath Kidston to expand in Asia after Hong Kong firm's takeover


korbansuspendcuy 8 / 18  
Oct 4, 2016   #1
The fashion brand which is renowned by its floral pattern, Cath Kidston, is ready to expand after its takeover by Hong Kong investment firm hiring William Flanz -former boss of Gucci- as the chairman.

Cath Kidston has already had 133 shops in Asia and will open more in Asian countries later this year. Besides, last week the firm collaborated with Disney including the collections of Winnie the Pooh and these new products led to the biggest online sales ever. The company are totally entering a new stage of selling with involving Asia to increase its profit and this year has been the most successful beginning to exist and gain more new customers.

Eventually, as well as going internationally, the company will attempt to continue the innovation by exhibiting the collaboration products with Disney which is launched in stores this month.

akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Oct 4, 2016   #2
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