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Summary _ Halal foods are particulary popular with millenia


Hujjatul19 45 / 70 3  
Sep 16, 2016   #1
One of Muslims' culture is accepted warmly in America by the indigeneous. Nowadays, people tend to pay more attention to what they consume. Regardless its taste, the consciousness of foodstuff holds another role. Halal foods becomes a trend to American. It is foods that are controlled based on Islam's rules, either its ingredients, or its treatment matter. It has its own criteria and requirement. The data from Bloomberg shows that it has increased one-third since six years ago and keep rising. This new trend isinseparable from Muslims' role in America that keep growing as well. Even though Non-Muslims in America take part in it also.

Iedha01 21 / 40  
Sep 16, 2016   #2
Hi,
I would like to give you some advice about your writing. I think your essay is good, however you should add some supporting sentences to make your notion clearer.

For example:
-Halal foods becomes a trend to American.
Why do you think They become a trend there? for example you put this sentence after it
- ... some outstanding restaurants which ...


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