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Article Summary : Jayapura Residents struggle with recurrent blackouts


nda18 46 / 81 9  
Nov 29, 2016   #1
Since November 2016, the capital city of Papua, Jayapura, has experienced day-to-day of 4 to 6 hours blackouts because they only had electricity storage gap up to 15 megawatts per day. This routine blackouts were prompted by several technical problems, affecting 110,000 households in Jayapura. Even though Papua have a hydro power turbine which has an electricity capacity of 2 x 10 MW in Orya Genyem, it cannot solve the routine blackouts problem due to issues with a numerous components.

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ibe13 36 / 50 9  
Nov 30, 2016   #2
Aloha, below are thoughts;

(1) [...] day-to-day of 4 to 6 hours of blackouts because they(refers to where?) only hadhave(use simple tense to mention a habit of people in Papua getting the electricity every day) electricity storage gap up to 15 megawattsper day.

(2) This routine blackouts wereare prompted by several technical problems, [...]
(3) Even though Papua havecan obtain a hydro power turbine which hascan generateanthe electricity with capacity [...] blackouts problemissue due to issues ...
faizunaa17 49 / 91  
Nov 30, 2016   #3
Hello nda, this is some advice from me:

Since November 2016, the capital city of Papua, Jayapura,Jayapura, the capital city of Papua, has experienced (...) because they only SOLELY had electricity storage ...

1. In general, if you read many essay or article in English, you must mention the information before add some details that support your main information.

Jayapura ---> the main information
the capital city of Papua ---> details.

2. Only ----> A1 Word (too common). So, i recommend to change into "Solely" (uncommon) ---> C1 words to boost your IELTS Score.

Keep hard work !


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