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IELTS Summary 2016 now looks dead set to become the hottest year on record


Dioba 68 / 104 7  
Nov 16, 2016   #1
The WMO officially informed that 2016 will become the hottest year ever recorded globally. Petteri Taalas, a WMO secretary-general, also say the same argument that every year has different record of global temperature. Moreover, WMO officially released the newest information in UN climate talks in Moroco which more focused on applying the appropriate preventions on global warming. Based on research, smog from fossil fuels constant in the last three years while increasing of carbon emissions was happened in the past. An interesting fact is when Donald Trump as the 45 president of the United States argues that an issues about the environmentalist was fought toward climate change, he also argue that the Chinese spread the hoax issues to make the American industries uncompetitive.

nda18 46 / 81 9  
Nov 16, 2016   #2
hi dio, these are my thought towards your summary

The WMO officially informed...[ what is WMO ? i think it would be better if you describe WMO to make your information more clear ]

... secretary-general, also saysaidthe same argumentthat every year has different record of global temperature.
[ i think the argument is not same ]
[also, watch your tenses]

Moreover, WMO officially released the newest...
[Moreover, WMO officially released the newest information from UN Climate Talks held in Morocco which more focused on applying the appropriate prevention on global warming.]

Based on research, smog from fossil ...
[Based on research, the proportion of smog which is a result from fossil fuels were constant in the last three years while the increment of carbon emissions happened.]

... Donald Trump as the 45th president of (...) that an issuesissue about the environmentalist was foughtfighting towards climate change, he also argues that the Chinese (...) American industries uncompetitiveless competitive .

keep writing, i hope it is helpful
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Nov 16, 2016   #3
Hi Dioba, here's another one from my end;

- also saysaid that the same argument
- that every year has a different record
- of the global temperature.
- induring UN climate talks in Morocco
- which morewere focused on applying the
- Based on the research, smog from fossil fuels
- constantly in the last three years while
- increasing of carbon emissions washas happened in the past.
- arguesargued that anthe issues about the environmentalist was fought toward to climate change, he also argued that the Chinese spread the

There you have it Dioba, as you can see, there is a focus on the construction of your sentences in this modification process and I hope you follow through with the enhancements.


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