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(Summary article) Moana made an estimated $81.1 million during the five-day holiday tally


alfinkurnia 33 / 47  
Nov 29, 2016   #1
During 5 days Moana, movies from Disney which estimated get revenue approximately $81.1 million. In other country, Moana earns $16.3 million particularly China, where it earns $12.3 million for the weekend. Its global cumulative stands at an estimated $97.4 million. In second place is Harry Potter: Fantastic Beasts and Where to Find Them, from Warner Bros company which has revenue estimated $45.1 million.

faizunaa17 49 / 91  
Nov 29, 2016   #2
During 5 days (NEED COMMA HERE) Moana, movies from Disney which IS estimated get revenue approximately $81.1 million

,,,,,, THEN WHAT IS THE REST OF THE SENTENCE ? YOU USE 'WHICH' THAT MEANS IT MUST CONTAIN MORE THAN ONE CLAUSE

1. After time signals don't forget add comma

2. WHICH + IS + ESTIMATED -------> PASSIVE FORM

GENERAL SUGGESTION:

PLEASE MAKE SUMMARY LONGER. GOOD SUMMARY MUST CONTAIN :
1. INTRODUCTION
2. BODY
3. CONCLUSION

AND I CAN'T FOUND IT IN YOUR ESSAY THAT STATES CLEARLY.!!!


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