Heart disease, cancer, lower respiratory illnesses, stroke and unintentional injuries are considered to be the five leading causes of premature death in Alabama, Florida, Georgia, Kentucky, Mississippi, North Carolina, South Carolina and Tennessee. According to researchers at the Centers for Disease Control (CDC) that those diseases actually can be avoided by making changes to harmful lifestyle such as smoking, drinking and lack of working-out, as well as unhealthy diets and being overweight. Supportive statement is simply stated as well by Frieden, a health official and researcher: "There are far too many places in this country where just by the unfortunate fact that you live there you are much more likely to die from a preventable cause, you don't have to move geographically, but we do have to move in terms of policies and programs." Yes, it is true that a death is definitely inevitable, but premature death surely can be avoided.
Source: time.com/84514/nearly-half-of-us-deaths-can-be-prevented-with-lifestyle-changes/?iid=sr-link2
... Centers for Disease Control (CDC) [comma ] that those diseasesailments actually can be avoided ...
Supportive statement is simply stated as well by Frieden....
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