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(Summary article) A new weapon in the fight against malaria


alfinkurnia 33 / 47  
Nov 17, 2016   #1
Anopheles is one of the most dangerous mosquitoes in the world. Recently, scientist discovered weapon to exterminate or eradicated it. They called ivermectin. It can't immediately protect human from bite anopheles but it can killing easily after that. Therefore, the researchers are trying to give ivermectin to most of people in an area, particularly which had several case area. It can seriously impact to anopheles and making inhibitans safe from malaria.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 13,033 4247  
Nov 17, 2016   #2
Alfin, when you describe Ivermectin, you need to capitalize it as it is a proper noun because the name describes a chemical name. You should also indicate in the summary that Ivermectin is a chemical because the reader needs to know how it is administered to the user. By the way, how is it administered? You forgot to include that explanation in the summary.

Additionally, you should have made mention of the areas where the chemical is being introduced for use. The places are indicated in the report and will help show a more authoritative tone for your summary. Before I forget, you should have included an explanation as to the method of administration of the chemical, how long it takes to take effect, and how long it can protect humans from the mosquito.

Basically, you need to add more information from the article in order to deliver a more informative summary of the article. Right now, the essay leaves the reader with more questions than information.
mardian24 46 / 75  
Nov 19, 2016   #3
Hi alfinkurnia, let me say some words

1. ... to exterminate or eradicatederadicate it

2. ... it can killingkill easily after that ...
After modal is infinitive, killing is noun and you need to replace to kill

3. ... to anopheles and makingmakeinhibitansinhabitants safe from malaria
You need a verb, so change making to make

Thank you
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