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Summary of TED Old books reborn as art (Brian Dettmer)


An obsolate book could be engraved become beautifully intricate forms and aesthetic art. Brian Dattmer,An Chicago artist and sculptor, found this gorgeous abstraction with his first creation which is called "Allternate route to knowledge". According to his justification, he have simply collected either fascinating words or portraits within the book and carve it by knife. Furtheremore, he seal the edge of it with a thick vernish to make it solid material in advance. Many kind of books which have been craved and become contemporary artwork such as: book of Raphael paintings who is Renaissance artist, traditional books, ensiclopedia, mechanics book, and even dictionary. All those mentioned books can be perfectly formed by utilizing knife and hold it by clamps and ropes. As the result, the out-date books have been trasformed into perfect art.

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Misspelling words:

Obsolate = obsolete
Allternate = alternate
Vernish = varnish
Ensiclopedia = encyclopedia
Trasformed = transformed
Furtheremore = furthermore

An obsolate book could be engraved become beautifully intricate forms and aesthetic art. -> you should pay attention on structure (word order), grammar (passive voice, s-v agreement) and make sure that your thought is easy to follow. You can re-arrange or re-write your text. "An obsolete book can be engraved into intricate form that has aesthetic value."
Hi Ifan.
Here are my few suggestions to finalize your summary.


An obsolate OBSOLETE book could be engraved become ...
Brian Dattmer, An Chicago'S artist and sculptor, (...) his first creation which is(You should omit those) called "Allternate route to knowledge". According to his justification, he have HAS (Verb Agreement) simply collected either fascinating ...

Furtheremore FURTHERMORE, he sealS the edge of it with a thick vernish VARNISH ‚Äčto make it solid ...
Many kindS of books which have been craved (...) artwork such as THEbook of Raphael'S paintings who is WHICH HAS BEEN WRITTEN BY A Renaissance artist, THE traditional books, ensiclopedia ENCYCLOPEDIA, THE mechanics book, and even THE dictionary.

... perfectly formed by utilizing A knife and hold it by clamps and ropes.
... books have been trasformed TRANSFORMED into perfect art.

One of the major mistakes is misspelling. Please, pay attention about that.
I really believe you can master this skill on condition that you wanna need much time to practice more and more.
Keep spirit
Good Luck.


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