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IELTS Summary 10: Origins of Writing


dils 20 / 33 2  
Sep 20, 2016   #1
Ancient civilizations believe that writing helps to deliver messages to God. As a communication media to God, ancient peoples gave a high value for writing activities. When the people started to establish permanent place in farming communities, writing system also developed.

The documentations reveal that writing system independently developed in three parts of the world; Mesopotamia, China, and Mesoamerica. Ancient Sumerians in Mesopotamia created the first writing system in 3000 B.C. in case of land ownership. Furthermore, Ancient Chinese began to write on metal and bone around 1500 B.C. and Ancient Maya created writing system as they applied symbols on religious structures and recorded the deeds of their rulers. Yet, the scholars proposed that Zapotec culture was the oldest civilization that used writing system. However, related with the facts, the writing system that we use today can't be apart from the previous history of ancient civilizations.

mdamanhuri77 22 / 35 3  
Sep 20, 2016   #2
hai dils,let me see your essay

Ancient civilizations inhabitants believed that writing helps to ...
... permanent place in farming communities, writing system also developed.

The documentations revealreveals that writing system independently developed (...) created the first writing system in 3000 B.C. in ...
... bone around 1500 B.C. and while Ancient Maya created writing system as they applied symbols ...
However, related with the facts, the writing system that we use today can't can not be apart ...

#try to paraphrase the word "writing system"
Fatirtalent 12 / 19  
Sep 20, 2016   #3
Hi ka,
you've done it well. nevertheless, here are my some comments

... media to God, ancient peoples gave a high value for writing activities.

People is plural form for person. you i think you need to put s afterward

The documentations reveal that writing system , i think that sentence is grammatically correct


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