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Summary an article : Parents Giving Unproven IQ-Boosting Drugs to Kids with Down's


Fadhilahumar91 61 / 73 6  
Aug 12, 2016   #1
Recently, some families choose to provide drugs for their children with Down's syndrome, because they think if that medicine can be alter the part and chemistry of the brain. Alteration of the brain by drugs can be improve the people intelligence with Down's syndrome. But, Mara Dierssen at the Centre for Genomic Regulation in Barcelona, Spain says if that idea was absurd. Because in methodically not yet to tested for the Down's syndrome.

Down's syndrome happen when a fertilization process, the egg produce extra chromosome. Also impact with baby's healthy. The IQ of the Down's syndrome is about 50 less than the normal people. But, the researcher founded that consume the bumetanide drugs be able to block particle of Down's syndrome in mice brain.

Carol Tamminga at the University of Texas Southwestern Medical Center in Dallas originate that many parents would rather try Prozac themselves than the danger of the trial's placebo group. Also EGCG from the green tea decrease an enzyme activity in the brains of people with Down's syndrome. The result of placebo-tested describe that linking memory, thinking, and mental focus.

newscientist.com/article/mg23130864-100-parents-giving-unproven-iqboosting-drugs-to-kids-with-downs/
ichanpants89 [Contributor] 16 / 777 309  
Aug 12, 2016   #2
Hi Umar, here's my contribution towards your report summary. I hope this would be helpful.

1st paragraph:
- Recently, some families choose to provide drugsmedicine/cure/treatment(drugs convey negative sense to the reader) for their children withthat experience a Down's syndrome (comma is unnecessary) because they think if that medicine can be alter the part and chemistry of the brain.

- Alteration of the brain which affected by drugs can be improve the people's ...
- ButHowever , Mara Dierssen at the Centre for Genomic Regulation in Barcelona Spain says if that idea was absurd. This isbecause Down's syndrome has not been methodologically tested yet.in methodically not yet to tested for the Down's syndrome.

2nd paragraph:
- ButNevertheless , the researcher has founded that by consumingconsumethe bumetanide drugs, it will be able to block particle ...

As you can see Umar, there are a lot of works that still need to be done. You need to be more careful in composing an accurate sentence. Make sure that your sentences are mostly accurate in order to help you improve your writing skill. Good luck for the next one :)
bornStunna15 1 / 3  
Aug 12, 2016   #3
Hi, Fadhila. Iam about to give you some of my thought on your writing

the researcher founded (Found itself already in form of V3, so you dont need to add more "ed" in the end of "nd")

not yet to tested= has not yet tested (because it is sounded naturally to me because you are telling about something that "is-not-already" so using an "has" will perfectly fit in this context)

Thank you, CMIIW


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